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Spirits of the dawn, soar to the skies,
Enlighten your souls of eternal brilliance,
Blaze and die, within the privacy of this mountain,
Let the nature waltz in rhythm, with this midsummer night's dream,
Inhale these pavilions of timeless sublimity,
Oh, the enchanters of true beauty's berceuse
Shower those tender blessings of divinity,
Over these fragments of shattered dark,
Ignite the chains of midnight slumber,
This phantasm, ascend and awaken the moon.
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Author notes
I loved this;
And I love the title too.
Scarlet Whisper gave me the title.
Thanxx
And I'm 12.
A contest entry
- 10 Lines........Impress Me! by Celticmoon.
300 points, ended February 18, 2007, 21 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 24 Hour Contest---Enter Fast by WhollySurrendered.
475 points, ended March 17, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - AP Best of the Best Season Three Preliminary by B Chandler.
300 points, ended March 15, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i can see the change in your writing from this earlier piece posted - time takes us and wraps us in brevity
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What a great write Karmel Kandy! I hope you will continue to write beautiful poetry as you have obvious talent for it. Congratulations on a wonderful write and the gold trophy you won for it! Charlynn
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Very impressive! Your descriptive imagery is lovely! You draw the reader into your frame of mind with the beauty of your words. I am in awe that you are only 12 years old! Wonderful work and congrats on the shiny gold trophy you've won for this great write!
~Lori
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Completely beutiful lyrical wrte. BERCEUSE!! I love tha word, perhaps thats because its what my mom called the songs she sang us as children!! Very poignant piece here, I love it immensely!! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
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Candy,
This is such an awestriking write you have penned here. A true gem of a poem and in just 10 short lines......WOW! I'm impressed especially for you being as young as you are. Lovely indeed!
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spirits of the dawn travelling through that zigzag enchanting beauty to awaken the moon is really beautiful...
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