Damn! Why did this have
to happen to me
Damn! i wish i could just
go back in time
Cuz i'm willing to change almost everything
just for him
Damn! yea i know i fucked up
But i didnt know
It's not my fault i didnt notice
my surroundings at that time
Damn! i'm going crazy right now
he just don't know
Maybe he doesn't fully understand
that i deeply love him
Damn! i apologize for not knowing
exactly what to do
If i knew what to do then i'd do it
cuz i care that much
Damn! i could use my tears for water
that is if i was eating & drinking
See now my heart is hurting
because you let me go
But i refuse to stay gone
Cuz i cant live without you
Damn! i cant believe i'm feeling
the way i do
I never had this feeling
Why do i have it?
Damn! how can u not trust me>
Am i just coming off as
a flirtatious hoe?
I said from the start you had
nothing to worry about
Damn! i said i wouldnt cheat
and i didn't
But you're still worried....
i'm thinking that you break up
to help your problems
Newsflash.....it just makes things worse
you both have to work it through
Damn! i cant believe you're doing this to me
I will gove my heart to you
permenantly just for you
If only you can stop thinking logically
and understand the other person's heart.
cuz that's the only thing you can express
that doesnt lie
Damn! i'm missin you so much
i dont cry much...but i cried over you
and only for you
These tears burned on my skin
with the love i had for you
and still have
because i still love you
Damn! i was just about ready
to be serious
But then you broke it off
once again
I know i fucked up,yes i did
I'm putting some of the blame
on myself
but it's his fault even more
cuz he knew your temper
you should know i'd lie my ass off if i knew,
lie all for you as much as i can
Damn! That's the first thing that cones to mind
cuz it's just unbelievable
Unbelievable how you say you love me,
but still you do this.
yes i say one thing then do another
but that's what you doing right now
i'm willing to stop that crap
and do what i say instead of
saying one thing then doing another
You said that you trust me but then
you turn around and say that you cant
Damn! My head is spinning with thoughts of you,
of love, of hurt,and of wonder
You say it doesnt add up
Quit thinking with your mind and think
with your feelings
i will brush off all those niggas
just for you
I'll make them all get away from me
just to make you happy
Damn! it's not fair how this
is turning out
You say quit holding back
so now hear my cry
Oh yea, you couldnt hear it earlier,
couldn't hear me cry for once
first time you could've heard it
and it was all for you
SO DAMN! i love you damnit
and that's not changing
And i have to have you cuz i cant
be without you
And even though my heart is hurting
it still belongs to you
and only you
And as i finish this
with tears from each eye.....
So ends this...for now..... DAMN! (THE CRY)
A contest entry
- ~*(~*~(~*~PRE WRITES OK!!!!!(~*~(~*~(SOMETHING SAD.....HEART TUGGING.....SOMETHING FULL OF FEELING.....NOTHING GROSS PLEASE!!! NO GORE THATS NOT SAD!!!! by xxlisajazminexx.
425 points, ended October 1, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable mention
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386 points, ended December 3, 2007, 19 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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Honestly, this poem would have been so much better without repeating damn and "i fucked up" so many times. I know you put alot of emotion into this poem, and I can understand some cursing, but I think using damn so many times took away from the poem as a whole...otherwise it was a good, not great, write...Thank you for entering though.
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WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
this was so full of pain for that one person you cant and wont lie without.................... i have been there to........ i'm there right now in fact and this really touched me .....thank you so much for entering such a wonderful piece into my contest!!!!!!
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nice job! It was pretty long but i have lots of tolerance. You did great, keep it up
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I've felt like this many times. I know you'd be okay. you always end up ok.
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The longest poem I ever read from you. But it's all good though. Too much DAMN though, but it's all goo too cause it's in the title. But good job
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Awww Kiala, i'ms orry to hear that!! But damn girl this poem is amazing, you can feel the emotion and the flow is amazing and it's just painfully beautiful! I absolutely loved.
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Long poem with strong emotions. It really like it cause I know where your coming from. This is rough though I can tell you were spitting it out. Keep it up and I hope you feel better.
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this is a beautiful poem but the part (Damn! i could use my tears for water
that is if i was eating & drinking)
is kinda rough lol, otherwise a very nice poem
~!~keep writing~!~
~marin~
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WOW
I love this it remindes me of how I feel
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