Tho' it may seem a touch harassing,
I must admit my ire's amassing,
Every time a piece suggests,
That everything's a terrible mess.
There's the chick who's poetry -
Unfettered by reality,
Makes the opportune opine:
That men are pigs, as low as slime.
Then the other day I read some shit -
That very nearly made me sick.
It was written by a racist hack,
But that's ok, 'cause he's black.
She hates him and he hates her.
They hate them, but I defer -
To ordinary common sense,
That works should have some relevance.
I care if you've been abused,
Beaten, broken, bloody, bruised.
I care if you've been oppressed,
And happily, I'll share your stress.
But what the fuck are you thinking,
When your words get to sinking,
To the level of those you hate,
Which is all of us? Well, great.
It's good to know just where I stand
So I can walk, hand in hand,
With all of torment's avatars -
Who think they aren't, but really are.
Author notes
I promised I'd write something in here about how I don't hate women. I don't hate women.
♦: Love of a Bullet
A contest entry
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I Don't Hate Women Either
Way to go - you hit the nail right onthe hrad with this one - couldn't have said it better myself - I like your style - the rhyme is great and this raps along beautifully - I tried rapping it - lol - I been with the same woman for 50 years - lol - I like the sermon you give in the 6th stanza - lol - your title could have been "Hoes" - lol - Bless God - keep on writing - Joe
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lol...I am so happy you do not hate women
I wasn't aware you had this reputation, but
anyway...I like this poem. You said what
you wanted to say and it made sense. Oh,
and thank you for continuing to read my
poetry, too
Love, Lane
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This is a very interesting write with alot of decent opinions in it well written best of luck in the contest
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This one caught my eye.
Thanks for the comment on my " I Am A Whore ".
I like this one. Don't ask me why, I just do.
and Good luck to you too
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lol your poetry always brings a smile to my face. I think you're evolving into quite a comic and I'm always on the look out for the next one to make me smile. Keep writing, I like your style
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Wonderful!
I love an edgy, in-your-face, shut-the-hell-up-all-you-pu**ies kind of poem and THIS takes the proverbial poetic cake, luv! WW
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Thanks for your comment... :-)
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haha
Nice.....really! Did you have a bad girlfriend. -
I'd probably change 'cause to because, and add an 'and' between she hates him et cetera.. for 'MY' ears meter, only because my ear likes its meter which is natural since it's mine.. lol
still, nevermind the techno this and that.. this is priceless..
oh by the way, I'm a whore
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That's good... I am going to use the "and" suggestion... it does flow better.
I am going to leave the "'cause" despite the fact that I agree on the flow, because it is more flippant, which is what I want.
Thanks for the ideas.
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