Life’s chance encounters can precipitate
Effects awaited, altering life’s course.
To thrive along through current strong, whose force
Sham obstacles must overcome, create
Eternity, where Time’s lease knows no date.
New challenges must then be met, of course,
Despising compromise, pretentions coarse.
Fast, echoes of regret disintegrate,
Each vain fear fades. Fresh strength can liberate
A current constituting constant source
Reviving joys through sharing intercourse,
New empathy, which may anticipate
Open house where friendship, love, blend, bloom,
Where darkness fails, where light tips scales of doom.
Author notes
Acrostic : Lets End Fear Now
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very nice write, i realy liked the way you formed and put this whole thing together, very nice, keep the pen flowing, hope all is well
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Really like this...creative use of the form
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Wow
I love what you've said with this piece, it is very well thought out and written. The only thing I found wrong was the flow in a few lines, which were the longer ones, because they threw me off while reading. But, otherwise, a very good piece. Great job.
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Each line has ten syllables so I am not certain what you mean by 'longer' lines ? -
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Just that some of the lines seem like they take longer to read in my head, it didn't sound even to me.
"To thrive along through current strong, whose force" and "Each vain fear fades. Fresh strength can liberate" are the two lines that threw me off really, because of how I read them.
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Fear is a strong current
Your style is difficult for me, a challenge. But in many places it is very beautiful. Sometimes I feel that you are intentionally being obscure to tease the reader??
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Another good one of yours that I enjoyed with a fantastic message to it. You are a very talented writer and I hope you long continue writing.
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Love your play with words
I'm not sure if it is what you intended or not but I felt, a battle of choices made to persue and push oneself through to the light at the end of the tunnel.Grabbing at the good using it as a force to gain strength to reach love in its truest form.(maybe my imagination gets carried away) good job. I shall be back thank you Sasktoonie
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SO creative, positive, inspiring, a pleasure to read, thank you for entering, please feature this to sahre it with others if you can!
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Wonderful acrostic. I personally loved how you didn't screw it up. Most people who write acrostics fuddle the words because they can't think of how to do it properly, but this was done most excellently. Great way to weave words together in more than one way. Great job and good luck in you contest!
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