You gave me your hand
And I drove a spike through it
You offered your heart
And I let it die
Yet from your wounds oozed Love
And your scars redemption
Each drop that rained upon me
Removed all stains of sorrow
We are children of blood
Baptised in the death of another
We are Bought
By the most selfless suicide in history
And all he sought
Was the useless life of me.
In death we now live,
Alive to love.
Content to give
What we hold in such abundance.
Love.
Author notes
"If we could poke God with a stick and make him bleed, he'd ooze love." - Pastor Bryan.
Sorry ya'll, not my best piece of writing, but I thought it'd fit in pretty well around Valentines Day. ^_^
Please tell me what you think
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First of all, it's good to see another poem by you, and second of all, this is really good! It speaks volumes about the love of God and what He did to save us from our flaws and miscalculations.
"Yet from your wounds oozed Love
And your scars redemption
Each drop that rained upon me
Removed all stains of sorrow"
Favorite lines are those ones there...especially the last two in the stanza. They are beautiful, and they brought about a powerful image to my mind. Nicely done.
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Thanks Supe! I love getting comments from you. ^_^ Yeah, God is so amazing, I thought "Who better knows what Valentines all about?" I read one of your poems a little while ago, about imagination. It was really good. Such praise from an author makes my day!
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Wow
I don't know where to start. The imagery, the flow of the words, just absolutely beautiful. My favorite part was "We are children of blood, baptised in the death of another." Never thought of us being children of blood, and baptized in another's death...just wow, interesting way of putting it. Keep up the awesome writng.
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Thanks bro. I wanted to talk about the cross without using too many of the same old images. God's love is crazy awesome, just time everyone else found out. Thanks for reading my stuff, I really appreciate it.
Sunchild
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Now that i Can read it instead of just hear it I realize what a great poem it is. But then again that was kinda a given all along
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Thanks muffin, ^_^
I know. I slaughter my pieces over the phone, but I did do some reconstruction on it too. Glad you liked it, I love to hear your feedback.
Sunchild
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this was a great poem. I don't really have much to say..I never thought about Christ commiting suicide before...that's a new view for me.
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This is just so beautiful and lovely. I think is a great piece of writing and you shouldn't come so hard down onto it. I liked how it flowed and how you got out what you had to say loud and clear. Great Write and thank you for sharing it with all of us.
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Thanks. You give me more credit than I deserve but I'm always open to praise. lol.
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I think you have written a great poem. Although I don't agree with the philosophy behind the words, I found the poem very nice to read. Happy Valentine's day! peace always in all ways...
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Wonderful
This was a great poem. I really like the feeling behind it and how it turns a frown upside down. -
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Thank you. If you can understand the feeling behind it, than my work here is done! I appreciate your reading my stuff. ^_^
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beautiful poem, loved the flow and it had very nice imigary i liked the lines "And your scars redemption
Each drop that rained upon me"
~!~keep writitng~!~
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Thank you, I love to get feedback on my work!
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