chorus
I will shine for the Lord as the world looks on.
I will not let go and we will not be gone.
I will not forget that this is how I feel.
I will not give in; I know the feelin's real.
1st verse
I'm a little weary from the journey,
And I know I won't always be O.K.
A lack of friends- aside from my attorney,
And I'm still tryin to find a better way.
I'm lost inside a mountain of emotion,
And I know that the world is watching me.
'seems I hardly get time for devotion,
Yet- sometimes it's like I'm always free.
'Tried to hide my life inside a closet;
Guess I didn't want the world to see.
But everything that's good in me- he caused it.
So I will show the world what I can be.
chorus
I will shine for the Lord as the world looks on.
I will not let go and we will not be gone.
I will not foget that this is how I feel.
I will not give in; I know the feelin's real.
2nd verse
I'll bet that your life seems complicated,
And sometimes you feel crowded by the noise.
But then, when everything you know has faded,
You realize it's hard to make a choice.
It's like you're wanderin on a dusty highway,
And you don't see much point in lookin back.
Well, trust me friend, I tryed to do it my way,
But He was there to fix me when I cracked.
bridge
(Back up vocals)So what's the name of this illusive man?
I will shine for the Lord as the world looks on!
(Back up vocals)Who'd try to save me- any way he can?
I will not let go and we will not be gone.
(Back up vocals)He died and gave me everything I need,
I will not forget cuz this is how I feel,
(Back up vocals)To proud and bravely, stand up and succeed!
I will not give in; I know this feelin's real!
(Back up vocals)So what's the name of this illusive man?
Jesus died for me!
(Back up vocals)Who'd try to save me- any way he can?
And that means everything!
(Back up vocals)Who died and gave me everything I need,
Cuz he rose again!
(Back up vocals)To proud and bravely, stand up and succeed!
And Now he is my king!
chorus
And I will shine for the Lord as the world looks on.
I will not let go, and we will never be gone.
I will not forget what he did for me.
Jesus is my life, and I feel so free.
I will shine for the Lord-.... as the world looks on.
I will not let go-...and we will not... be... GONE.
Author notes
This was to be the conclusion to my first big screenplay.
Perhaps you'll judge this as religious, and if you do that's your choice, though it would mean that you've never looked up the word. Anyhow, should that be the case then feel free to remove me from this contest. All I know is my "spiritual" satisfaction was found in Christ, and that is not religious at all.
For the contest "The real you. NO LIES!!" I picked out fourteen poems that described the inner me, and I asked the only person who knows me- beyond the lies and secrets I have kept- to help me pick which one most represents the real me. It was my fiance' who I asked, and I was honored and struck with love once again when she chose this one. It has always been my desire to be this man since I found my faith, and to know that this is exactly who I've become fills me with joy. Yes, this is about more than me, but you must understand that- from a faith view point- I am what I believe in.
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Comments
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I usually try to avoid work with religeous connotations. Personally i have nothing against any form of spirituality, but it's usually such a hot topic where people vary in opinion so drastically it isn't worth the debate, even in intratheological situations it's difficult to discuss. But I won't deny that this piece shows a great deal of compassion and strength.
-Mal
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Thanx so much Mal,
This means a lot coming from someone neutral!
Recently I joined a band, and we are metal, so the chance that this song will ever be on our album is slim, but I am also in a worship band so perhaps one day it will make it to an album, or at least definately to my screenplay.
In either case, I am glad it made it to your computer screen. Thanx again!
Cheers
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Unashamed, and I commend you for it! I especially loved your 2nd verse. There were a couple misspellings that I found distracting, but since it's probably meant to be heard more often than read, I suppose it's not that big a deal.
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This reminds me of "In the Light" by dcTalk. I love that song and this is great as well. It is always encouraging to find fellow Christians who are not afraid to vocalize their beliefs and convictions especially for me in college where I am often surrounded by less than godly behavior or downright atheism at times. I'm with Taling Toni. Shine on and we will light the world yet.
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Shine ON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is a beautiful song and I would love to hear sang with music!!!You really shine for the Lord Jesus with this piece you have penned here!! Good luck in the contest and thanks for enetering our contest!!!~Jacen &Toni~ -
Religious - not overly. Spiritual - yes and inspirational - yes! I felt the rhythm of the piece immediately. I'm not expert on lyrics, but poetically, the flow is well formed. I felt that you shared your thoughts nicely without being melodramatic. I noticed a few minor typos, "tried" and the omission of the word "is the the third line of the chorus. Constructively, I don't have any suggestions. It seems to be a fine, emotionally charged write. Nicely done!
~Lori
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I found yhay for a songform the words cumbersome and convoluted. I think this would be stronger written in formal verse, or else simplify whats being said if kept in song. What you have said is true for religion, there is a difference for spirituality.
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This is very well done. A tad feelings- and works-oriented for my cold Lutheran preference, (
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Its different and i like it. i am religious myself. so its great to see someone who wishes to be someone so great kind and never does any wrong to anyone. thnx for a lovely poem/song good luck
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yes...
yes...I can accept this as a spiritual piece...and let our lights shine on! Thanx for entering and best of luck to you...peace & blessings
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This was one of the first songs I read, right?
You have always captivated me.
Never stop.
~Jenn
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I won't.
I can't.
It's part of my deepest, most inner being, and I am so thankful that I have found someone like you to share it with!
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Wow, this has such truth in the meaning, a great way to speak your heart and explain your reason for living.
I truly hope that you continue believing, He will.
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well thankyou Jailah. It has been this way for me for five years now and I got no intentions of quitting.
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