I wait
Contemplating
Spring breeze gently blowing
Sweet cherry blossoms fill the air
With dreams of you beside me once again
Here I sit waiting your return
With the blue sky above
Sitting alone
I wait
Author notes
Rictameter- a nine line unrhymed poem. Syllable count 2, 4, 6, 8, 10, 8, 6, 4, 2. The first and last lines must be the same.
In a list
A contest entry
- Picture Inspiration, 10 Lines or Less 15 Entries by mysticstorm.
425 points, ended February 13, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I counted the syllables, they are all correct. You have written a lovely Rictameter here.
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Very nice. Sweet, vivid imagery, gentle, soothing tone, sprinkled with the slightest touch of yearning and nostalgia. I almost hate to tell you that the third line has 7 syllables in it....
This was a wonderful interpretation on the rictamete. Congratulations on the silver! Thanks for entering, and good luck. -
Lovely
So romantic. Fits the picture beautifully. -
Aw, This was bittersweet. You did a great job and the graphic once again matches perfect. Congrats on winning Silver!
Kari -
I think this was great as this write pulled me into every word,I loved the peace that settled in to my soul as I read your brilliant penning.
Thank you for entering
God Bless
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This is perfectly done, from form, to word choice, to picture. A very lovely job all around.
Thank you for entering! -
BREATH TAKING
My SISTER this is so beautiful,from the picture,to the style,and the words...You are truly a great poet*rose*
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Very good. I love the line contemplating Soft spring breeze gentle blowing..." Good job.
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