The ego plays tricks on eyes that struggle to see
The extent of the world is not limited to that which you cling
What ferocious fallacies have befallen thee
To hold high your lies of divinity
The Devil clutches the heart of thee
Your responsibility ceased where his hands meet your willed defeat
No reason lay beneath
In laziness, your mind asleep
Within the darkness, demons teethe on your bulging esteem
Leaving not a drop of humility to redeem
Its comfort you seek in your time of need
Comfort you will not convey without personal gain of your feat
Search for reasons behind your tragedies
A test which God conceived to prove you worthy of his love to thee
Or penalty for sinful deeds, a forced guilty plea
Your indebted soul you must bleed for your God to reap
Dreaming of that perfect dream
Of a time after death proceeds
That heaven your soul will reach in return for a lifetime of belief
And begging to a God that cannot hear your constant entreaties
This God who created the world for your taking
A narcissistic partaking of power and killing in the name of He
Of stealing and denying the want of greater things is the same as greed
For the form is a motive to appeal to His creed
If God Himself had not have been
Man would themselves conceive
An all-powerful, all-knowing image of man to believe
A natural deity of a human being, how hard could that be?
A contest entry
- CONTAINS RELIGION [Caution: May pollute your mind] by Southern Twilight.
800 points, ended October 27, 2008, 31 entries
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Brilliant. I love this bit:
Dreaming of that perfect dream
Of a time after death proceeds
That heaven your soul will reach in return for a lifetime of belief
And begging to a God that cannot hear your constant entreaties
But all of it is great. -
Found this one hard going; am not sure was this because of the structure, or the wordings. Then again, am a little tired at work, so it could be due to that also.
What I will do is come back later, when I am more awake, and have another read through, to see what i make of it then
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Interesting
I think I have grasped your meaning. Correct me if I am wrong. Man has a void that was designed to be filled by the Spirit of God. If man, out of ignorance or pride, refuses to allow that void to be filled with the Spirit, we attempt to fill it with other gods. The greatest of all idols is the idol of self so we therefore fashion a god in our image. A very interesting and intriguing piece.
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I keep reading the last verse and i'm so intrigued but I am not sure I understand it 100%...are you saying that if there isn't a true God, man would create a god out of man? It's very thought provoking and thats really what poetry should be. Very well done
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This was a very honest and inspirational piece. Now matter what beliefs you have, I think this will apply to everyone. Done with beauty and spiritual enlightenment. Great job.
Soulful Woman
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wow very compelling and intriguing
i think that this poem is very powerful, not being a religious person myself i can relate to the words in this poem because it is suffering, conflict, pain etc in the world which makes me question if there really is a God
i dont believe that he could be omnipotent and omnipresent, i know this is a narrow minded view but it is my view none the less
very thought provoking, a great write
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i love poems like these that give me a moments pause and reflect on what is I know for sure....although this didn't change my mind on any of these things , i found it to be a greatly written account of your personal belief. thank you for sharing. keep up the awesome work. peace.
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