Today is the last time, you will sip on your cup of sorrow
For there will be nothing soon, and certainly no tomorrow
Forget your life and its values, of material and pathetic pity
Disappear in salt with Sodom, and its twin, Gemini, evil city
Encourage your friends to sugarcoat, their self inflicted faith
Forget any trust as you cattle trampled, to rapture to be safe
Away from the radiation rays that intoxicate, and rob your breath
Damaged your brain, this will quickly lead to your own death
Enthuse your forlorn feelings, as the truth of the revelations unfold
Imbibe your senses in exotic dances, in the Salome mould
Examine your reflected vain, face, on the eve of destruction
Mirror the matrix of genetic life, in the hope of a new construction
Author notes
Option 1.
A contest entry
- Last Cup of Sorrow... by Sacrificial Love.
600 points, ended February 14, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything and Everything by Welcome-To-Hell.
700 points, ended February 16, 2007, 54 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - First Year Anniversary At AP! by Trixie08.
300 points, ended March 2, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Are there seriously no true poets here??? by whispernthedark.
585 points, ended June 19, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options. Come and look if you aren't too scared. by Cutie4eva.
1200 points, ended July 18, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poetic Backgrounds by Pollycheck.
600 points, ended August 31, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Wages of Sin Are DEATH - a contest for TRUE religious zealots! by Mad Pastor Grovell.
375 points, ended August 4, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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You have entered this item into a lot of contests. Maybe you will win elsewhere BUT NOT HERE AS THERE IS NO MENTION OF HIDEOUS PUNISHMENT FOR SINNERS!!!!
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This is definitely a gloom and doom poem, not the type of poem that I would normally read. I have to admit however, that this is a very well written poem and you have definitley shown that you have a talent.
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This is a good poem. Keep up the good work. xAngelx4xLife
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Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
whisper
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Brillant!! This is masterfully written and it displays your talent well. I loved your philosophy on this piece and it's great so brillant. Thank you so much for sharing and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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This is wonderfully writen best of luck to you in the contest
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This, how would I begin to describe this, without the AWESOME artistic ability with wich you grace this site. This is the ultimate warning. The picture it paints is the picture I'd like to impose every time I come face to face with some obliviouse materialistic little snatch, ( not my place, happens way to often, Who am i to impose) regaurdless, I admire your talent & your rare genuine perspective. THANX, i'm sorry I don't partake more often.
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Good Job!
You took a difficult list of words and worked then for your benefit!!!! -
I loved all of it. Right at the end was the best part
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Good use of words given in word bank for this challenge. Some difficult words to use in a poem, but you have worked them in well. Good flow, interesting read.
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i liked it
you seem to have true faith, and and fight for it, at least that's what i got from your poem, i can understand your struggle to stay true and live for God, it's my daily battle too.
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well geores I saw your poem in lights
and since i have not read you lately I was anxious to see that talent of yours again.... and not disappointed either feels quite personal in nature as always you hve solid rhyme andd a good flow with stark images well done and good luck in the contest i have this one bookmarked we will see if i come up with anything 
love and light,
Blaze
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This was a beautiful piece. I loved it. The only thing you should do right now is reread it. There were a couple lines that sounded a little off. In the second paragraph, the second line didn't make any sense to me. You might look into changing that or even just explaining it. Otherwise, you did a great job! Good luck in the contest!
~Chelsey~
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Very vivid and strong, certainly paints a picture that is very clear. Frightening and a good solid warning. Well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Good
First off: I really like the idea of this poem. I like the mood, I like the word choice and I like the imagery - this is a very good poem. But, there is always a but isn't there, it was a little difficult to read. Try adding more punctuation throughout the poem where it deserves to be. It will give the poem a rhythm for the reader to follow and make it easier for the reader to get through. Like I said, it is a wonderful poem - but I feel that if you were to add punctuation throughout the experiance of the reader would be much greater. Great job.
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