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A Sound Of Thunder

Scent of ozone

power cuts the air

separate there from here

 

 

Kah-Wap          realities

 

 

           Slam              together

 

 

another Universe invades

rules change

nothing is

 

 

              as it was

 

 

Paradigm shift fills the rift

 

 

                                              I levitate

steeped in disdain for the falacy of gravity

  

 

Bam           air             Smacks  air

                                                                  

shifting mirror turns inside out

 

sinister means left handed

right brained

pain has a volume knob


 

 

 

 

                             epiphany

 

 

 

 

joy is the same

choose your level

 

 

detect the veins in the nimbus

 

neon strings weave a tapestry of who

 

 

 

you are

 

 

 

and connect to every other was

 

 

is and always has been

imagine expands                  outgrows when

electrons shift                                      photons intermix

 

 



                                        !what have we here!  

dip thoughts in pigments and dimensions

envision the brushstrokes

 

 

 

 

and they're there

 

theta waves                  the tools of

 

 

 

 

                     architects

 

 

 

 

build castles in the air

spin crystal spires on cumulus islands

 

                                                                        

whirl and spin and worlds begin

easy

 

 

 

 

               spun sugar on a stick

flick of the wrist

 

 

Shriek Eureka!

       

                              bouyancy concieved

 

       *

        *

       *

    float on

                                           

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  • Tangled Angle
    February 21, 2007

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    VERY cool. In all ways. The whole concept was fantastic, and the way you applied it to the poem itself was great. This is one of my favorites by you.


  • literaryromantic
    February 20, 2007
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    I apologise for not commenting before.
    Here is a comment.
    This is a very lovely poem.


  • vonbjort
    February 13, 2007
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    Sorry for not commenting on your poem earlier, when viewing it.

    But i'm back now :-)

    i like the though feel of the poem. Something monumental about it. Can't help tinking of Doom Day or something.

    Keep up the good work :-)


  • Mystikrypton
    February 13, 2007

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    Whoa... This piece was very...out there. There was some great diction in this poem, and I tended to enjoy the format you used. You truly depicted the calamity of a thunder storm through your words, especially including the onamatopeias, though I wasn't too fond of the all caps. Nevertheless, this was an intense poem, and I enjoyed it. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.


    • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
      February 13, 2007
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      Thanks!
      I tried a different method of highlighting the onomatopeias, I think it works better! Thanks again!
      dk


  • Theater Of Dreams
    February 13, 2007
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    Yikes!

    Love the metaphors...love the storm! Here in the desert such a majestic moment allows one to meet their maker! Great job painting a superb picture of a whole new way of exploring the majestic ionized sky!


    -James.

  • Sickened Princess
    February 13, 2007

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    I really liked this write! It was so descriptive. You did an awsome job!!! I really enjoyed reading it! Amazing job!


  • JohnnyD gold member
    February 13, 2007

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    Diana,

    Ya know what you have penned here? Not a poem on Weather but rather the intricate interplay of all facets of life. Love, loss, hope, sorry, expectation, disappointment and exaltation. If one reads it closely yet from afar they will see what I mean. Very beautiful and well done. I suspect you were writing this but experiencing other feelings as you did such. Nevertheless, either way, beautiful and well done.

    Yang

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