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InkHeart

Word Forms on the note
Ink stains the paper where
Three unspoken words form
"I love you"

Yet tears fall down
Leaving Its own mark
Its signature of lost love

He lost her
Screaming out to the world
His emotions shines on the blank page before him
And letters cut into place now
Never to be removed

My love, My heart
You are the soul that stands before me
I have lost you
Yet so close you are to me
I lost control
You died in the wrecked car
Your hand against mine
And I promised to never let go
But your hand was lifeless upon my hand
The ring on your finger is all I have left of you
Yet I feel your breath on my lips
Our daughter will be fine
Shes just as brave as you
I can see her eyes in you
So in a way never will I be without you
And I'll never forget you
But I lost you because I was drunk
And the car flipped around
And my addiction stopped
Because it took me your life
The one so close
To figure out life is not a joke

So I'm standing here with Ink on a page
And tears to reminding me

Never to be that way

 

You gave me hope

That my soul will always be with you

That no-matter what my daughter

Will turn out to be you but

Tears run down my face

I want to be with you

I want to show you

That my love will

Always be with you

 

My heart is Ink

Heavly my soul sinks

Into the page

Forever

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  • indomitable
    June 18, 2008

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    good lord this is haunting and sad. it so revently speaks of a loved one lost in stupidity. this is well written and flows so well, its reaches into the readers heart and strikes a chord. the imagery is rich and paints such a painfully beautiful picture of agony. i loved this, thank you.


  • nilav
    June 18, 2008
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    loss by death is really unbearable....and these words bring out the pain...


    • dragontuba
      June 18, 2008
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      Loss of True Love by unexpected death is more then pain but life changing...thank you for the comment...sometimes... a person has to feel pain before they can change their life.


  • Beauty Of Silence
    June 15, 2008

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    omgosh! i think this was brillaint! almost made me cry! this was a really sad piece, very touching... such a lovely write! Your lines had brilliant flow and tho its long, it kept me hooked on.. and the ending was so smooth!

    A very strong write with powerful emotions and vivd imagery! keep penning!


  • Freed Man
    November 4, 2007
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    well from my point of view i just lost my fiance about 7 months ago i just proposed to her and a semi took her from me. i know i called her my gf but shewas my fiance it's hard to get over her leaving and i feel like it all was my fault and i have wrote those words on a peice of paper and and cried over them many of times in hopes i will see her reply on them but never has it came

  • Freed Man
    November 3, 2007

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    Man i keep on reading this poem as i've said before. but it applys so much to me i lost my gf i know excattly how this feels. thank you for putting this up

    • dragontuba
      November 4, 2007
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      Thank You

      The Focus of this poem was suppose to be about addiction and how that drugs not only affect you but the ones you love and hold so very close..This never happend to me and I hope it never will...and I hope no one ever has to, the purpose was appose to inflict the "addiction" society of life and help people to quit... I'm so sorry you lost someone you loved so much, and kept so close...

      Sincerly, Stephen Arthur Zogal


  • Freed Man
    July 23, 2007
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    Wow i keep on coming back to this poem it has so much feeling i love it. keep up the good work


  • someones-muse
    February 23, 2007
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    sad but so good i loved this poem i wish i could write more but i dont know what to write but WOW


  • Freed Man
    February 23, 2007
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    wow sad story i know how you feel i lost my love also. hope things go better.


  • Veronica Leigh
    February 22, 2007

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    wow this is incredibly beautiful and such a sad story. The ending is perfect and very beautiful. Thank you for entering my contest and I wish you the best of luck!


  • risewiththesmoke
    February 20, 2007
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    wow...

    this is totally amazing!!! *hugs* very sensitive, definitely touched me. bookmarked. >.<


  • tawk gold member
    February 20, 2007

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    This write put tears in my eyes, I hope that this really did not happen. Wow so full of emotion and pain. Good luck in my contest


  • sprack44
    February 19, 2007

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    Three unspoken words form
    I love you
    i think you should put quotes around the i love you part...like this::

    Three unspoken words form
    'I love you'

    'And I promised to never let go
    But your hand was lifeless upon my hand
    The ring on your finger is all I have left of you'
    powerful stuff my friend

    Nice poem!


  • Lj-
    February 18, 2007
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    Very good. I like it.


    Thank you for entering,
    Good luck!

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