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[ Two green olives ]

Two green olives
            Clash
With turquoise stones,
Surrounding shiny blackberries.
A
Hundred
Black widow legs.
One bunny slope;
Soft, gentle.
Honesty in a
          Not-so-perfect
White picket fence.
Secret secrets
    Revealed
In the unfolding of an
Innocent flower.
Tousled amber.
Aspens: white, strong,
In the figure of Adam.
Faintly,
An Irish Spring
                Lingers.
A sleepy sunrise
      Bursts
Upon the
Speckled fawn.
Butterflies
Dancing on rose petals.

Author notes

its a bit deeper and more shallow than one might think. tell me what you think its about!

honest critique - do you really get it??

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  • Gasp
    February 13, 2007

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    uhh, well im not very good at this stuff, but about life? pfft i dont know lol but its a good poem lol great job

    keep up the writing

    ~marin~