a love so deep that only God knows
a symbol I give of 1 blooming rose
an expensive gift just wouldn't suffice
for our love is beautiful, it can't have a price
the flower to show your beauty compared
to the prettiest thing that nature could share
the redness for which you have filled my life
for times good and bad, through joy and through strife
this rose which I hold, it lives in it's prime
but our love can't be touched by the passing of time
so I give this rose, for loves beautiful start
and you hold not the rose, but my very own heart
Author notes
Little Bud of Love by nicole0525
A contest entry
- ~Love Me Tender~ by -Ink Artist-.
525 points, ended February 16, 2007, 40 entries
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Comments
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Omg this is soooo wonderful I love it great job hope to read more soon
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Amazing
WOw, your rhyming is so amazing to read, not a single interuption in the flow, love the emotion within it as well
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This is such a lovely poem. A tad on the mushy, cliched side but it's wonderful to read something like this every once in a while. Your words are filled with utmost love and meaning. Although I didn't care for the rhyme too much, I loved the feeling expressed through your words. These lines are particularly powerful -
"our love can't be touched by the passing of time"
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"you hold not the rose, but my very own heart".
I do agree with Sharcu, though - using 'one' instead of the number might make it sound more poetic.
Thanks so much for entering.
DancingRed.
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Beautiful from beginning to end! I wouldn't be suprised with all the contests you entered it into if you won at least one trophy.
Nice metaphor and wonderfully done. Just one thought, though, in line 2 change the "1" to "one" as it should be spelled out. Also maybe center your poem and divide it up into stanzas. Just a couple suggestions. Thanks for entering it into our contest 
--Tim
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Almost missed this, glad I came back. I enjoyed the poem very much...GETS
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Thanks for the nicely rhymed and cleverly thought out write about love. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
Paul
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you did not put your option or "angel" in your comment box. im sorry. i did not read it. you are dq from the contes. im verry sorry but you did not fallow my rules.
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glad you liked it
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Thank you for adding this delightful poem to the contest
The best of luck
~Lilac
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Lovely sentiments in this piece. The rhyme was somewhat forced in a few spots and the rhythm was slightly stilted but the emotion shines through. Thanks for your entry and good luck!
~Lori
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lines 9,10, and 12 were the best.
i didnt like the attempt to rhyme at lines 5 and 6 but everything else was great
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