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Lost and Forgotten

Amidst this cold grey sky
as the snow begins to fall
Like frozen tears from above
emitting the worlds pain
Only  to melt and fade away
forgotten and never missed
So tired of pretending
that everything is okay
As the snow keeps falling
and smiles fade away.
Wanting the world
to feel the way I do
Lost and unloved
slowly disappearing.
Melting and fading away
forgotten and never missed.

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  • sgking123 gold member
    September 1

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    beautiful

    Lost and unloved
    slowly disappearing.
    Melting and fading away
    forgotten and never missed

    you took me hard here.I feel taken emotionally....so sad and forlorn...an unloved soul would and how cruel it would be to leave him or her to the fate that is.beautifully done partner.


  • Valerien Raven
    August 30

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    A brilliant write. It's filled with a lot of emotion. A very sad piece I must say, feeling forgotten and never missed, I've had this feeling on several occasions.
    Everything will be okay and no matter how things work out, your good friends, in your personal life and on here, AllPoetry, shall miss you and would never forget you.


  • MoonlitRoses
    August 26

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    A wonderful write. Filled with emotion used with a passionate and flowy tone =] Lovely write, indeed.


  • Eric Marsh
    August 24

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    a lovely poem..passionate and sad..i feel it is written from an existential perspective..yet i feel a lot of spirituality here..and hope....keep well and take care...eric


  • pepping wolf
    August 23
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    hi

    hi my name is Anna and i really liked this poem


  • Sarah957
    August 16, 2007
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    a tale of isolation... many of us feel like this at one time or another, good use of metaphor.


  • Anger Inside 201
    August 15, 2007

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    oh wow. it is absolutely wonderful! u did an amazing job expressing all the emotion. ur a great writer, keep it up.


  • Laura
    March 17, 2007

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    you have made something very dark shine out like the beauty of a star well done you have written a very beautiful and thought provoking poem..laura xxxx


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    February 14, 2007

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    you know i can never forget you, it is hard to do, this is a stong poem that paint a dark and cold picture, you did a great job keep it flowing


  • Tre Brown 3000
    February 13, 2007

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    I enjoy wat i read.....no doubt about it. Looks like wanna 4get wat u cant get off ya mind. But it only happens to tha best of us. If only it were easy 4 me! well keep it up...its very good!


  • dark life 1992
    February 13, 2007

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    this was a very wonderful piece....I wanna learn to write like this one day i loved this keep it up k


  • Princessdove
    February 13, 2007

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    Nice poem. Every snow flake is unique and beautiful. Just like you. Take care. Great job on this one. Keep up the good writes.


  • burdened
    February 13, 2007
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    this is an immensly beautiful piece, but how very sad, i have written something lke this, and i hope that you will be missed, but never go. this is a fantastic piece and i feel you pain. take care and keep your chin up XxX

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