Her music played through the empty fairground;
haunting melodies interspersed with lilting harmony.
Faster and faster she sung,
spinning the words wildly like a dervish;
creating dark magic with her voice.
Powerless to resist; tossing flowing manes,
the dappled mares broke free of their harness,
ascended majestically, deep in the night sky.
Pirouetting and dancing, tasting brief life;
no longer part of a rusted, closed down ride.
A contest entry
- within words by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended February 14, 2007, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Hoodwinked
I thought this had something to do with a maeery go around. Well I think the mare would be free to go where she wishes but she won't be a real horse. Congrats on your silver trophy. -
BANDITS UNITED!!
I love this!! I can remember riding the merry-go-round as a little girl and dreaming the animals could race me away from my ugly, bitter life to the stars. You certainly deserved this trophy, dear one.
Wolfie
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Sweet you got silver! When I read this I swear...I thought you'd get gold. Well, its Gold to me. Congrats!
LL
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A sight to behold...
Nice cohesion of words here to create a vivid, haunting picture. Very atmospheric ~ well done indeed.
Congrats on the trophy, too! Yeay!
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So creative and certainly captivating. Thanks for sharing... x Love and light, Butterfly.
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short sweet to the point lovely imagery absolutly amazing imagery. very beatiful. i love the compatisons you use in the piece very well written and very... magnificent
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You never cease to amaze me darling, exquisite!
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Thank you........appreciate the comments.
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awesome...incredibly awesome.... I was reading it through without much thought, then the meaning hit me, and I had to re read...wow...the perfect wording to get the picture implanted in the mind of a reader. I loved it...I applaud you.
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awesome interpretation, loved the imagery created and your wording, best of luck in the contest,
Brenden
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