Dancing-Till blood flows from my feet
Dancing-To the drum beat
Dancing-Till I’m in a coat of sweet sweat
Dancing-Till death’s been met
Dancing-All night long
Dancing-To an endless song
Dancing-I wish it was forever more
Dancing-Till I’m dead on the floor.
A contest entry
- within words by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended February 14, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Such a unique piece of writing with great flow. Thanks nfor sharing. Love and light, Butterfly.
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I think that this is a ausome poem. I like how you made it ryme. Keep on writting and I hope that you read some of my poems.
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Welcome to Allpoetry
Dancing can be a great outlet for the emotions, especially when dancing seems to be in the blood as they say! it's an excellent way of expressing the mood of the moment and definately an art when it is done with feeling.
Your title is very apt for this particular poem, well done, you have made a good start with your writing here on AP.
Welcome to allpoetry, check out the site and see all it has to offer, please do not hesitate to ask for help if you need any, the allpoetry greeters will be only too happy to assist you.
~Katie~
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i personally dont like the dancing repeated. takes away dramatic effect instead of adding it.
sorry.
jailah -
how very different and it really flowed well too,
good luck with your entry in the contest,
Brenden
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