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Even in my dreams

You belong in my heart
Your love always helps me start
For every beginning there is an end
But you of course are a forever friend

You will always have a piece of me
Without you where would I be
You held my hand through all my fears
You dried my eyes from all my tears

You helped me up when I was down
Though I often made you frown
Our love is not as it seems
You’re even in my dreams

We moved apart, our love remains
From my heart it never drains
You’re in my thoughts most every morning
As I watch each day dawning

You keep in touch, just by phone
I can answer when I’m alone
You area total part of me
Without your love
I could not see

Author notes

option 10 even in my dreams
dedicated to my almost everything

A contest entry

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  • Dragonheart1 gold member
    July 22

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    This is a good poem on friends remaining true..The picture is great too showing your emotions described in the poem..faceprints to not be forgotten!


  • Live4FandFs silver member
    January 9
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    Beutifully Said

    Love lives on no matter how far apart we move for its start from one's heart ends at the other's heart... very beautifully you penned the emotions & feelings of love & friendship that lives through eternity... very well deserving of winning trophy... thanks for sharing... take care Minoo


  • plainoljoe
    November 18, 2007
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    love may change faces but it doesn't have to die. You have proved that in this wonderful poem

    Joe

  • Eusebius
    May 29, 2007

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    bravo

    A deftly done piece of poetry showing that friendship and loyalty still have meaning in world where selfishness is always the bottom line...bravo...bravo...


  • Rosemary Stroebel silver member
    February 27, 2007

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    Beautiful

    This is a beautiful filled with so much love and beauty.

    Let the ink flow and your fingers dance

    Rosemary

  • Welcome-To-Hell
    February 14, 2007

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    This is just wonderful paints a great picture of love real love and the flow and rhyming scheme is just right very well penned


  • poetryality silver member
    February 13, 2007

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    This poem spills from a loving heart. It is easy to see that you are filled with love for this person. May you keep these emotions intact always. This is a lovely rhyming poem Poet. I wish you well in this challenge. Beautiful!

    Much Love ♥

    Renee

  • damaster
    February 13, 2007

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    Thank you my sexy smile.... means a lot we still think alike in so many ways, especially about each other. And yes, i do think of you on a daily basis (even when i try not to lol). You've always been good at making me frown, of course making me smile is something you were always good at to.... Happy Valentines day to you my sexy smile... you'll always be in my heart... love, the almost anything one... ;-) xxx ooo xxx


  • Poetic Aphrodite
    February 13, 2007
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    Thankyou for your submittal, Bella,

  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    February 13, 2007

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    4th line, should cause be course?

    nice sentiments here, the emotions and love are heartfelt and sincere. The flow of the poem could use some tweaking, as the meter appears off in some lines. While I love rhyming poetry, an aabb pattern can tend to sound Dr. Seuss like if the meter isn't right. Other than the meter, I really like the feel of this, and the emotions it stirs. Well done.
    Rory


  • Beautimus Princess
    February 13, 2007
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    nice rhymes! love your poem very much!


  • bgoub
    February 13, 2007

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    A seriously touching poem. he rhyming couplets sometimes disrupt it for me, but the poem still manages to seem free and unconstrained, much as the emotions stressed are. A charming and lovely tribute to true love. Wonderful,
    All the best,
    Ed


  • Sweet Escape
    February 13, 2007

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    It was very sweet. I hope you and that someone will be together forever. It reminded of the movie, A Walk To Remember. It was good and very well written!

  • Big Hearted one
    February 13, 2007

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    that sounds a lot like unrequited love and boy do i know how that feels! this was a beautiful and sad poem please keep up the lovely poetry

    signed,
    some person lol

  • Somewhat Damaged
    February 13, 2007

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    Great emotion

    Very well written. The feeling of longing is so hard. Your words put it quite well. Good work


  • Regenhart
    February 13, 2007
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    Love it !

  • killerpiggies07
    February 13, 2007

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    awesome

    i love it! this is totally how i feel right now so i can really relate. it almost makes me wanna cry

  • Lady-Pegasus
    February 13, 2007

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    Very touching piece, I do like it a lot! The Background is divine and a great compliment to this! Although the slightest bit bumpy (and i do mean slight!) it is overall a wonderful piece, to be certain. Again, lil sis, you have indeed done well!!Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.


  • plainoljoe
    February 13, 2007

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    "love never dies, it just changes complexions' "Thank You For Sunday" by 'mitimse'
    Love is always with you no matter where you are in relationship
    the Satyr

  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    February 13, 2007

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    Very beautiful and heartfelt. The background really adds to the feeling of the write. Very well done. Very deep emotions expressed easily and simply. Good luck in the contest.

    Jeannie


  • TJCasser
    February 13, 2007

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    A touching tribute to someone, truly. I'm hardly huge on rhymed verse, but it's not too distracting here from the general feel. Well written.

  • semperfimom39 gold member
    February 13, 2007

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    Awesome!!

    I loved the background along with this sad but heartfelt write.. Thank you for a beautiful piece. I shall read this again and look forward to more of your writes!


  • dlksaf
    February 13, 2007
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    Good

    I like it. I really contect with this poem myself. But I really enjoyed it.

  • Disturbed Prodigy
    February 13, 2007

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    i am just going to say what is on my mind, this is more beautiful then the first spring day, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Tattboyspet silver member
    February 13, 2007

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    Good write!

    I enjoyed this one too - even though I could feel the loss, I could still feel the love and without love there is no hope ... so, well done!

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