I wonder how subdued lights of longing
can compel a naked passage of
Braille surrendering?
beyond all entanglements of seductions and discouragement,
spiritually delicate sounds radiate 'silent sadness'.
quietness can bleed a person,
except for right here,
in the darkness
of trust.
grief is in truth, but
truth is never in
less than
the most
love.
her sweet smile warms my fate,
it is her I love to hold.
should her heart die,
it dies in mine.
Author notes
Anonymous contest, so please be certain to not mention my name.
A contest entry
- Soul Mates by trista.
500 points, ended March 1, 2007, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow! Congratulations
I'm very, very much a beginner with poetry, but I can appreciate the message in your poem. Well done, keep it up!
nitenurse
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I want to tell you how much I really love this poem. I've read it, like the others in the contest, many times...and each time it leaves me feeling serene, if just a bit sad as well. The depth of love you feel for this person is beautifully shown in each and every word. (At least I would assume, and hope, this is a personal write.) Technically this is a masterpiece in my opinion. Spiritually it is no less than amazing. Thank you once again for your entry.
Best wishes,
~J.
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what serenity you have captured in this piece, explaining the solitude but not aloneness one must feel when they find their "True one"..good job, good luck!
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A deep read. One I thoroughly enjoyed. It is hard to put words to this eloquent meaning for it goes beyond what most of us have ever experienced. I am able to 'see' this poem then explain it. Which is in my opinion, perfection. And aye, no, it does not apply to set gender in its meaning. For it is not of mere physical sense either..not touch with hand, nor kiss of lips. It is a quiet illustration of that moment we can be in serene peace with the one we are sitting with in silence. No words, thoughts or reasoning. It simply is and becomes.
Marvelous and bravo!
Lady Blue~
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I could swear I commented on this already, but apparently I did not? I'm so sorry about that!
There are many passages in this poem that truly warm my heart, and are beautifully said. I will be commenting further on poems after the contest closes, but for now I thank you so much for your entry and wish you good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
~J. -
in the darkness
of trust.
this is the best way i have ever heard this put. for reasons i won't get into, trust has become so dark to me that there is no longer a light at the end of the tunnel. thank you for sharing this poem with me and i wish you the best of luck in this contest which you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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a sweet smile that warms your fate,
sometimes (and only sometimes) that's all it takes.
should her heart die,
it dies in mine.
Beautiful !!!
that's what true soulmate should feel within.
manyblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Excellent
Wonderfull perfound thoughts
well crafted in words
Some of this is stunning
like this passage
quietness can bleed a person,
except for right here,
in the darkness
of trust.
grief is in truth, but
truth is never in
less than
the most
love.
WoW
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I wish I knew how to read Braille. It amazes me when I witness it being done.
The first stanza of this poignant writ engulfs the reader with a sense of peace. Surrender is always best when letting go of something that has us tightly in its vice, especially if it is no good for us. But love is hardest to release when we are pitched in the wonder of its grasp. I have found no reason to ever let go of the man that was destined for me. We have been joined for nearly 33 years, and no matter what we will be unto death.
Your poem skirts through many beautiful metaphors, and embraces the love-afflicted in a solace that is pure, and driven. This is a succinct poem that runs like children in a meadow of flowers. Very beautiful poet. Very worthy of placing in any challenge. I adore this writ. I wish you the best in this challenge.
Much Love Always ♥
Renee
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Renee
Just wanted to mention,
your comments are always excellent
Rick
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Well done ...
Now I'm glad I disqualified myself ... this is what I refer to as 'quiet beauty' in poetry, what little I know of it.
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Oh wow, this is stunning!! (I suddenly feel like withdrawing my poem
) I loved this, it is truly a beautiful write with amazing words.
Enjoyed the subtle alliteration and style.
Well written and good luck with the contest.
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"quietness can bleed a person,
except for right here,
in the darkness
of trust."
Sighhh...Ahhh, Poet...How lovely this is...I adore the title, too...Such pensive Beauty, my Friend...Good luck in trista's contest, Sweetie...
Wanda
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