on this night
of all these cold nights
i think of you
now i don't hate you
but i don't love you
i have a few who tell me i'm quiet something
i have many tell me i'm nothing
in the last few weeks
i've lost friend and gotten even fewer
but now i'm hear
i felt a sudden change tonight
something unexpected
i cud not cry
i cant
i cried for you
you gave up something and just gave up
you fell down and said i'm done
i cried for you tonight
i just cant say why
my love for you will never die
todays my mothers birthday
and sorrow is all thats in my way
i morn for you some times
not this time
i cry i cry for every thing you will miss
everything i will miss
all the things in life you will never git to see
all those little things that you said made you fell free
i'm sorry for everything i put you threw
you deserve much better than i
even my unborn child should git better
the one your with i loathe with such passion
and even he has better than i
so this child will never know of his true father
never known what kind of man his father was
even as young as i
this is my poem but i must tell you all
i have this plane in my life
i will make it to my 18th birth day
but on that very secont i plan to end it
12:00 perfect midnight it will be June 2nd
i will no longer be i'm 16 now
all i must do ish wate for my day to be remembered
i give it 3 week till i'm gone thought
A contest entry
- I Need To Cry My Everloving Brains Out!! by Angel With No Halo.
525 points, ended February 16, 2007, 26 entries
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this is real sad and to tell the truth i wasnt expecting to cry but you have truely hurt me i never said i didnt want you to be in the babys life and that yoiu give on something like that is messed up
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wow..i figured that since you've read and commented on so many of my pieces (which i appreciate soooo much) the least i could do was the same..and am I ever glad that I did..you are an amazing writer..and i really hope that you aren't serious about ending it on your eighteenth birthday..cause bud..no matter what life throws at you it won't last forever..it could last for a long time but eventually it will get better..or maybe it has already changed but you are just so used to seeing it one way your eyes aren't accustomed to seeing it through..
I know there's been many times that i've prayed that i would get hit by a train or faught the urge to cut my life away..but then i think of my memories and what i would never see in my life..never have kids or go to college get married..there's so much that you have to look forward to in your life..so if you are truely serious about this piece..keep in mind that out there somewhere...there is that one person that would never be able to live without you..someone that loves you with their whole being..even if you don't know it..everyone has that one someone..
Great piece again..
-sae-
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very nicely done hon. Well written and very sad.. very. I do not think it wise to kill yourself though. Things pass and you find other things to love and cherish. Hold your head up high and remember that life is never as bad as it seems. Thank you for entering hon
~Krys~
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NOOOOOOOOO!!! hun...wtf...
I hope and pray this isn't true...
you have no earthly idea how much I care about you, we all do. I know what it's like to grow up without a father and a mother (real mom and dad, that is) and I tell you it sucks ass. If you ever need to talk to me you know I'm here. You know you can talk to me, I've open ears.
At any rate this was a beautiful poem, but damn... don't do this.
I love ya, hun
~Lisi~
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