Water
Clear as essence
As a diamond heart -
Whole indestructable and pure.
Raging
Fire of menace
As purifying heat -
Beautiful and strong forever.
Light air
Changing ever
To flow as a whisper -
Essential yet corruptible.
Strong earth
Unbreakable
As all the cosmic laws -
Eternity to enduring.
Author notes
This poem is written in a "military format". The first and third lines are read forwards, the second and fourth lines are read backwards. Let me know what you think of the style!
A contest entry
- Military Form by silverscent.
375 points, ended February 20, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Elements (Water, Fire, Earth, Air) by tabbykat10988.
600 points, ended February 27, 2007, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 5 of 5
-
wow... i love the style... but i think this one could be read either way... this is amazing... great job and good luck in the contest...
-tk -
Well done.
-
Very nicely done. I loved how you encorporated the elements into this, it made it a very enjoyable piece. You used the form well too, thanks for having a go with it
and thanks for entering.
-
Oh! I looked at this contest, but didnt think I could so it! YOu certainly did an great job on this one. The choice of the elemets are a great topic, too, since there is so much to write about them , and there is definitly four stanzas. Each stanza is so pure and descriptive, too@ Love it!
(Hope you get placed today!)
U no whoo -
unbreakable
pure and indestructable whole...yeah all of it. i always did prefer the elements, they are reliable.
Adding your comment:
1 - 5 of 5
