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Heat

It is hot! The air above me suffocates, lacking breeze.
This July eve, the heat affects me most.
Tomorrow, I will end one affiliation and begin anew.
The future causes my brow to arch, the heat adding to my discomfort.


This house, my home is large and strong, but may not survive the coming storm.
All before me, I must be willing to cede as a consequence of this nights decisions.
I feel the heat began to crescendo into a fire storm.

I envision myself appearing at the very gates of Hell.


I finish my dress and put on my coat realizing, soon, this will be my home no longer.

I will be branded a traitor in my native country, a patriot in my new.


As I sit in the Congress, I am alone if not for Jefferson and my Congressional Secretary. The document prepared by Jefferson beckons my signature. I am overcome with emotion as I, John Hancock, President of the Congress, slowly, in large bold script, sign The Declaration of Independence.


As I return to my home, I realize this heat will not go away for a long time.

 

I return to say goodbye.

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  • Florida Sunshine
    June 26, 2007

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    wow, this is very effective and powerful~ even gave me a ripple of chills on the part:
    "As I sit in the Congress, I am alone if not for Jefferson and my Congressional Secretary. The document prepared by Jefferson beckons my signature. I am overcome with emotion as I, John Hancock, President of the Congress, slowly, in large bold script, sign The Declaration of Independence"

    Nice write~ thanks for submitting it into my contest~ pleasure having you here! thanks so much!


  • Moonlit-Reveries
    April 12, 2007

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    This is pretty interesting, you made this event come alive with emotion You have a very nice flow going here. Personally I could relate to the discomfort about the future adding to the heat. My favorite line here is: "I feel the heat began to crescendo into a fire storm."

    One little typo thing I caught: you need an e at the end of goodbye.
    But very nice write you have there.

  • EncounteredEpiphany
    February 14, 2007
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    historical

    I have to say what a twist of imagination you have,ecentric Ilove it LO-AMO keep it coming!!!!!


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    February 14, 2007

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    Wow! This is wonderful. You really brought history to life in this write. Great imagination. Well written. Thanks so much for this entry and good luck. Jeannie and James.