370 million people
speak english.
why do I feel
stranded?
marooned
mid-wave
in silence
where dark
is as large
as lonely.
In a list
A contest entry
- Alone.....Prewrites allowed by LoveNeverDies.
370 points, ended May 17, 2007, 93 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Emerson quote inspired~ for kids only by NotAMolly.
575 points, ended July 30, 2007, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical comments are most welcome.
Comments
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That was really deep. And VERY well written. Thank you for entering! I have felt these feelings before. Alone in a crowd. This poem really evoked an emotional response, so Great Job!
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This is really nicely written. So many people share the same thoughts as you.
Great job!
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Thanks ever so much for the comment!
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I thought you've shown a good fragment here. I think it was much complexion behind a few words. I feel your title could've been a little more creative but other then that, I enjoyed it. Thanks for entering!
Good luck~
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Really? I liked the title because loneliness isn't something usually measured. Thank you for your honest opinion and also for a great contest.
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I think the flow is fine. At least I got it going heh. This does feel sad ... I feel sometimes I am surrounded by people who don't speak my language. I suppose we're all talking English but the slang has taken over!! NOOOOOOO. Everything is slurred and it's just messed up. That's what I got from this. Favourite lines:
"marooned
mid-wave
in silence"
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Thanks for your comment.
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Ack !!! Lol...English is my second language , happiness my first , Storm
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