You never heard
a word I said
you were the source
of why I bled
You knocked me down,
pushed me away
You never encouraged my
spirit to stay
I was like a butterfly
with broken wings
instead of nuturing you
blamed me for things
I would have blossomed
with your love
me this treasure
from up above
Your advice I
would have heeded
the gift of love
was all that I needed
Where once I felt
invisible to you
today I am free to
create myself anew
I am grateful for
my life today
I'm learning to
trust and not be afraid
So as far as ever
judging me again
This might be a good time
for you to make amends
And MOM... Just so you know
your approval is
no longer required!
Author notes
Reclaiming my inner childhood from my mother. She was quite cruel much of the time growing up. But now being a grown woman, I had to finally set her straight, let her know she cannot control me, only love me. We are doing well these days, feels like I have a mom for the first time in my life.
A contest entry
- Betrayal's Pain. by Poetryintheblood.
350 points, ended May 24, 2007, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rebel! by Cinder.
900 points, ended February 23, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very emotional ... I love the way you formed this out ... it was interesting ... You put some good thoughts together and penned a beautiful write ... You have talent for poetry my dear ... I hope you and your mother are doing well now ... I know how you feel only with a father instead ... he did many of these things and more ... Very beautifully done ...
could you (for rules sakes) put the option number in the author comment box ... I know which option it is ... and I know it is petty ... but for the rules ... would hate to have to DQ a beautiful poem such as this ...
thank you
much luv
Smile, it confuses people
Sparkeh -
I sorry you had to teach your mom to love you, glad to hear that you could forgive her. I'm sure it took a great deal of courage for you to write about this but you did an awesome write. I wish you gold with this write.
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Thank you for your heartfelt entry, Josephine
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this is very loving and very sad at the same time. it is hard when you feel rejected and misunderstood by somebody who is supposed to help you and nurture you during your life but after getting to the end of your poem, it sounds like this made you a stronger person.
having three children it is hard for me to read about children who have not had to love and nurturing they required in life but i can see that even though it still hurts, you have proved that you can stand knowing you did your best. the said realization is that sometimes when people realize the DEEPER mistakes they have made in their lives, if more often than not too late.
i admire your courage in writing this and wish for you to have much love and happiness in your future. best of luck in life and this contest. be well and be blessed
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you are so kind
Wow what an expression of care and concern you have shown me, I am somewhat humbled by your reaction to my poem. This is one of those poems that must be written (I have several of them) in order to make room for any healing to begin in my life, which has happened, thank goodness. Warmly, Chrissy
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wow
To break away from the family bonds that have kept you down. To release your anger & cerify your being. tough but gutty write. Nicely done
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This is quite a good write, I wrote something very similar to the write you have here...thanks for entering my contest much love, Raneika
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This is a great poem expressing your thoughts and feelings beautifully in this poem. I am glad that your childhood days are not effecting your adulthood and I wish you the best, keep penning dear poet
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