Sometimes I feel a little lost
And when I cannot hide my fears
She might touch my face and smile
She might hold me close to her
She knows how to set my mind at ease
There are the days when I can move mountains
And there are days ... the mountains laugh
She doesn’t look up to me when I fly
She doesn’t look down on me when I fall
She knows how to set my mind at ease
There are times when I see her tremble and cry
Losing a friend or someone close
There are times when I know she is angry
at a world so full of hurt. But always and ever
She knows how to set my mind at ease
And so I wonder...what is it that she takes from me
She gives so much …she loves so completely
She is like a deep well of cool sweet water
And I am like dry parched earth in summer sun
And always … she sets my mind at ease…
Is there such joy in giving …
Is that the food of this Goddess’ soul?
I’ve looked deeply into her eyes when she loves me
That is the food of my soul…
And I know what it means to be loved
I want to tell her...
How she has sewn up the ragged loops in my life…
That I would be so empty without her…
She puts her finger to my lips… husshh… I know
She holds me …and sweetly sets my mind at ease
Peteskid
A contest entry
- ~Love Me Tender~ by -Ink Artist-.
525 points, ended February 16, 2007, 40 entries
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A little long for my personal taste, but it was beautiful none the less. Heart-felt and an enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing and entering it into the ocntest
--Tim
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i forgot to say that that picture is so cute too!!! good luck again but you wont need it! -
This is lovely! What more can I say? YOU have too much talent!!!! haha, You are so lucky to have a girl so sweet
good luck
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thank you Raven
for your kind words and comments
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You did a great job with this write, was a pleasure to read. Good luck in the contest...GETS
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Very nicely done and wonderfully romantic thoughts. I enjoy the repetative lines - very cleverly done. Good luck in the contest.
Paul
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This contest would not be complete without this devine entry, thank you
The best of luck
~Lilac
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Emotive and romantic. You've used some lovely imagery to coincide with your feelings of love for this woman. My only suggestion for improvement on this work would be to limit the repetitious use of 'She' and 'And' at the beginning of so many lines. Wonderful expression of your thoughts. Thanks for your entry and good luck!
~Lori
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post contest
thank you for the care in making helpful comments..much appreciated; and thank you for the contest too.
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Well done!
Sweet, romantic poem...an ode to your lady. Good Luck in the contests!
Maureen
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Thank you
for reading and your lovely comment
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Mmmm should I ask or just let this wash over me? It is absolutely beautiful.
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Thank you
These first person writes are fun
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