How in time, does a frozen heart melt?
When in life, everything, solidarity.
The earth, the stars, the dance, the song.
How could so many, get it so wrong?
Fire to the fields,
Burn, twisted, angry love.
Pure, pearl, white love.
Heat and emotion so strong,
And yet for so long, so many have had it wrong.
Ice and fire,
Dark doomed desire.
A camped night and coconut palm,
Caressed cool calm.
Champagne and cocaine,
Perfect purified plain.
Velvet pillow and concrete,
Cast clean complete.
My heart and this devotion, this limitless ration,
Is in us, in everybody, this everlasting passion.
Author notes
An entwined piece with a quesiton and an answer, the definition of love and my emotion. Enjoy.
-chris-
Please tell me what you think
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You can't get away from your deepest feelings. Good write and the message was clear. Pen on... -
This was great. It pulled you into it, twisted you around and made you see both the pain, and pleasure of this consuming emotion. Well done. Would love your input on my work. ~Shella
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I will most definately comment on you work
-chris-
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I really enjoyed your use of conflicting imagery in some of your couplets, especially the one. "Velvet pillow and concrete. In a sense I got the image of a homeless man sleeping on a velvet pillow, at least affording himself the luxury of having something "Nice" for his head.
really enjoyed your words.
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wow! bravo me-amego's,
i love reading peoples opinions on love, and its good to find one thats different than all the rest that either say 'its good' or 'its bad'...
this was a very well comprised poem... but i wished you'd have changed plain to pain... oh well not my poem...
however this was a brilliant, near flawless piece. you should be proud!!!
yours
mike!
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Cheers very much for the comment well the reason I used 'plain' is it's a three way description, of a type of love, and also of champagne and cocaine, pain immediately springs to mind for that rhyme, but it wouldn't have worked. cheers though
chris
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well--champagne and cocaine--not a good thing. the write has good rhyme but cocaine and champagne just have me running the other way. thank you for sharing this with me today. hope2makeit
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The point is it's a three way description, of a type of love, and also of champagne and cocaine, how coke is white and plain and how champagne can also be plain amist a room full of dresses and suits. sigh Thank you very much for the comment
-chris-
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nice one
luv coop
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thank you!
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hmm interesting , but beautiful poem i loved it, nicly done!!
~!~keep writing~!~
~marin~
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