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the pianist

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the pianist
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as the artist’s painting takes shape
musical etching develops
In the form of musical notes
mesmerized at the creation
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musical etching develops
in the counterpoint overtones
it flows through my very being
enchanting is the melody
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In the form of musical notes
penetrating my very soul
aurally enters my spirit
filled with vivid moving colors
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mesmerized at the creation
melodically piercing my mind
a canvas of symphony as
the pianist performs his art

 

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Author notes

Retourne

Like so many other French forms, the retourne is all about repetition. It contains four quatrains (four-line stanzas), and each line has eight syllables. The trick is that the first stanza's second line must also be the second stanza's first line, the first stanza's third line is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's fourth line is the fourth stanza's first. Retournes do not have to rhyme.

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  • Spiritual Nature
    February 15, 2007
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    Well done for a complicated style of writing. I have never tried my hand at one, yet. Great job.


    • Amera gold member
      February 15, 2007
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      thank you, it's actually an easy style, you should try it.

  • Eulb kcalB
    February 13, 2007

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    this piece Amera is so exquisite...I can honestly say that I am left speechless... well done!!!!


  • And Hyetal
    February 13, 2007

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    This wasn't one of my favorite retournes, but it was still wonderful. Keep up the great work!!!

    Cassie


  • xoxhanniexox
    February 13, 2007

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    very pretty. i really liked it.. thanks for posting!

    oh,, and i loved the picture of the piano. :]


  • Princess-Gloria
    February 13, 2007

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    Beautiful !!!!,one day i would like to
    try something with a picture have never
    tried it before. Keep up the writes ,
    and the music was superb
    Hugs Gloria


  • Spiritvision angel
    February 12, 2007

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    Awesome write my friend with musical notes that flow out evenly and gently within the enchaning melody. I really enjoyed this very much.


  • Turtledove
    February 12, 2007
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    Interesting form

    Nice write; music seems ok. Pretty pic of the piano. Good job.


  • blueyez
    February 12, 2007
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    Lovely

    This was such a beautiful write and the picture went so well. I love your verbage!!!!!!


  • PerVirtuous
    February 12, 2007

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    Very visual portrayal of music. I wholeheartedly approve. Flow and form are perfect, as always. Three maestro-bunnies for your listening enjoyment.

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