The sky is a three-demensional child's game.
Gouge them out of the sky and inject them with pain.
Little glimmers of hope spilled onto dark silk,
But no one ever cries over spilled milk,
or do they?
Look up.
Draw a path from each promise with an eager fingertip,
Sooner or later, you'll touch the one I cautiously grip.
I wish I may,
I wish I might,
I wish the skies,
Weren't closed tonight...
Zig-zag across the midnight with me,
Do you see any of what I see?
The questions unanswered, the unending surprise,
When we see the glimmers fade, as each one dies?
Tell me.
Do they serve a purpose or purposely serve?
Solid bloodstream or a broken nerve?
Sand by the ocean, or an ocean of sand?
A wonderland of hope or hope of wonderland?
Stars are just the tears in our eyes,
Dirty glitter of the stars that collide.
Emotions turned in to liquid down our face
In the depth, in the dark, they know their place.
Laying down on the grass I wonder why,
An audience of stars must watch me cry.
Each shimmer falling soft, a tear of their own,
With chains of our latest trends, covering our naked bones...
I wish I may,
I wish I might,
I wish the skies,
Weren't closed tonight...
Do stars cover the dark or does the dark cover them?
Broken and unwanted or unwanted and broken?
Do stars light up the dark or does the dark make them light?
A dream of night shattering or a shattering dream of night?
Afraid to dream?
Look up.
Look at them.
Tallies of what's been broken.
Look up.
Look at them.
The beauty in sarcasm.
Look up.
Look at them.
Reflecting what they see.
Reflecting all the tears of you, and you,
...and
me...
Author notes
I hope you can catch the symbolism in this...it's actually kinda symbolism in itself...^_^
Hope you like it!
A contest entry
- But we flew to far away from Neverland... by Dawliah.
600 points, ended March 1, 2007, 28 entries
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This would make for an amazing song..well well well written love it!! Its also outside the box and I love that!thank you for sharing! ♥
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OMG!
This is absolutely amazing! I love it all of it...this is going in my bookmarks and staying for eternity...or is it going into eternity and staying in my bookmarks
I can't express through words what I think of this poem...awesome...no, fantastic....not quite it is way better then those....gotta go read more.....my last three applauds to you 
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preoww...which means good
uhm...i wish i could have caught the symbolism in this poem but, alas, i did not. great write either way. I especially liked the very first line. that's prolly my fav. line of the whole piece.
Keep writing!
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"I wish I may,
I wish I might,
I wish the skies,
Weren't closed tonight..."
This is witty a good play on words.
That's very reoccuring in this, and that compels me. =]
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very deep
excellent poem, marisa captivating write..
fabulous...
fleur de Rosa
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that is a lot of tears, you know i think you have a point in this, but i think that stars are more then that, they are hope and they are despair, it is but a star, to try and figure out what it is, there are too many anwser, i just think that the stars are there to watch over us, you just have to find yours, the one that shines brightest when you cry, to let you know it is there for you, keep it flowing
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Really neat. It's very unique. I especially liked the lines about whether the dark covers the stars or the stars cover it. Very interesting thought.
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excellent
well writtn very different indeed full of much wonder as to what the stars really are great job -
Nice...deep and dark and yet not at the same time. Very, very good work, I'm impressed.
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Wow
WOW...this is very well thought out my darling. I loved every word of it, the layout is so captivating. I loved the picture you painted with your words as well. Very well done.
Keep writing
Love
Countrybabe
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This is a very creative and profound write Marisa Sweetie, and I caught the symbolisms as well, love you always Mom
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