I need you here
by my side
your perfect soul
to which I confide.
Your eyes so blue
I can see the sky
You quietly listen;
don't ask why.
Walk with me
down this lonely road
walk with me
so I'm not alone.
You are here
in my heart
your words, precious,
allow a new start
Without you here
with me now
Nothing is worth it
This I vow.
Author notes
I think it was the option about friends...
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this is a sweet piece. but what option is it under?? can't seem to tell. . . though I AM slow at times.
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Awwwww. So sweet. I don't believe it is hard to comprehend.
Out of all the poems I've read that dealt with their own life...this explains the answer the best to me. It shows how an individual is important to another's life...it's not just you, but you need that other in order to feel connected. I really like this. -
The flow is lacking, and some of your rhymes sound very forced. It's a cute poem, but it's choppy and therefore difficult to read and comprehend.
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This is a very cute poem, straight from the heart and obviously true to the emotions of you, the reader. I feel your rhyme is a bit forced at some time, and therefore some of the flow is sacrificed, but all in all, it was a nice write. Thanks for entering!
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Welcome to Allpoetry
Your rhyming here is excellent giving your poem good flow, a sweet poem expressing the need for that someone special to walk beside you, someone who really listens, is in tune with your own heart and thoughts.
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Keep up the good work.
~Katie~
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