If long ago the star has died
then why do I yet see its light
there among a million points
and shining brightly in the night
You are still my sacred beacon
I will not believe you're gone
ever guide me through the darkness
lead me safely to the dawn.
In the quiet I sense your presence
glowing warmth seems oh so near
and I listen to the silence
as if perchance this fool might hear
whispered words of reassurance
" I would never leave your side
Faith my dear, a little longer
and I will dry each tear you've cried "...
Ever guide me through the darkness
lead me safely to the dawn
You are still my sacred beacon
I will not believe you're gone
There among a million points
and shining brightly in the night
if long ago the star has died
then why do I yet see its light?
Author notes
L. Carling
A contest entry
- For all of my past contest-winners... by WhollySurrendered.
475 points, ended August 5, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sumer, Auntumn, Winter, Spring/Sun, Moon, Stars, Rain by Bethany Rose.
525 points, ended May 15, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Never Ending Rhyme Pre-Writes Allowed Contest by piccola.
700 points, ended February 14, 34 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Need To Read by poets whisper.
900 points, ended September 14, 90 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Odd isn't it that so many of the stars we see twinkling in the heavens are long since dead. Burned out like the dreams we had that are now nothing but memories ... kind of a sad thought and yet the rhyme and flow are very, very good. (
sticks out tongue to free verse lovers everywhere.
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amazing emotion. great poem. good luck and thanks for entering.
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The emotions flowing across the page here are so strong and well defined. That middle stanza just really stands out and puts the whole thing cohesively enmeshed. Very nicely done!
♥ Touchof1der
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Reads like a love song, the flow is so gentle and the words are superb. I enjoyed just getting swept away in the moment of it all.
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Great write
Love the flow and feel of this poem. It is a great write. The tempo of the poem is awesome imagrey is great. I love it
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Excellent..
Loved this poem/song ~ great rhyme and flow and wonderful imagery ~ a pleaure to read... -
Very Strong
this is a truely amazing poem, you put alot of soul into this peice and it shows
i Love this Poem, it was an amazing experience to read
your words are beautiful
keep it up
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a strong expression
here of affection and the ide of a star light long after a star is gone is compelling because it is true and more and more people are beginning to see these mysteries..very nicely done
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The Femme Fatale of your poems.
This I do have to say is one of your finest... though all of your poems seem to be fine... nice background by the way, been a long time since I've been on too eh?
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This is beautiful Rakerman Have you ever considered song writing? Haven't I asked you that before? Lovely work my friend. Long time no see.
~Lyrical
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Wow.. I really really like this.
It's very thoughtful.
Great write!!
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