A radio screams another love-lost song through the frosty air.
The lightening conducts its grand orchestra of tyranny.
A weary cat can be heard hissing in the distance.
A “lost” teenager finds his way home at curfew.
You can hear the beginnings of a quarrel drenching the misty night.
These feverish ill doings-
It all-
An instrumental quarrel.
Just another night,
A hopeless night.
Another man thumbs through photo albums as he wonders why he breathes.
A laugh is consumed into the depths of the dark wicked night.
You can see, through a window, the flickering of a television in an empty room.
A family is getting home from a late night visit to an ill grandmother.
In the distance a chimney puffs out murky smoke like a train.
Are we simple Actors- lost in our life’s performance?
A dreary performance-
Shakespeare’s desperate cries?
Just another night,
A disparaging night.
Another person asks the million-dollar question- “why”.
A baby competes with its mother’s charming ways.
There is a sound of a door being dead bolted.
You can see a weary man tug his trash-can to the road.
Another tear trickles down the cheek of a lonely woman.
Are we the results of a recipe gone sour?
Alone-
A puppet dangling from tight strings.
Just another night,
An endless night.
And- the night is as dark as your loneliest dreams.
Another unanswered prayer-
Another opened bottle-
Another tear-
-empty
-desperate
-hopeless
Just another night,
A sad- sad night.
Please tell me what you think
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You have clearly set the scene for very low expectation. I would have hoped for a raw and emotive question. Good imagery.
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Good. Well thought out and just well done
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Fantastic!
This poem was intreguing, absolutely amazing. The format was excellent and well thought out. The plan and perspectives could never have a bad comment. I hope you write another poem like this as I will be eager to read it.
Good luck in you writing in the future.
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effin wow.
no other words.
there is too much truth here.
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wow.
this is a really awesome write.it is so touching in so many ways.I love the way you described it from so many differnet lives and feelings of sadness.
you really captured the emotions well.
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Such a emotional packed write. So sad. Excellent flow. Good luck in my contest
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This was good, very well described, and the multiple descriptions of many diferent tragidies was great. In this respect this peice has the capacity to grasp a hold of many readers, by relating to so many varient types of saddness.
I like it
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I think this is an explosion on all my sense from hearing to seeing to feeling...you have incorporated them all...I have had many many a hopeless night and never could exactly capture what it would sound like...you have done it well my friend..Bravo!!!
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This poem is so dark and depressed.The last nine lines are my favorite.I tend to like the endings of poems the most.don't know why.I also like the short descriptions.It adds to the feeling of despair.Great write.
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