i could love you but i don't
i could kiss you but i won't
why, do you have to ask
because of a certain cercumstance that we all know to well
you love her
she loves you back
what more could you ask for?
you shouldn't desire anymore
your head is telling you you need space
but space could surely break you
you need to handle this right
don't cause her too much pain
this shouldn't hurt her
but her blife isn't a game
you need to think about your actions
and the consequences you both need to over come
so what are you going to do?
the out come is completly up to you
A contest entry
- hey [bro/ken baby] give me your world. by makeout kid.
475 points, ended February 19, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Not quite what we're looking for, it's more berating someone else than ruing what one can never have. Kudos to you for sticking up for yourself, though, I love the strong tone.
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*smiles* I'm in a similar situation right now. Wanting a love so much but that love being taken by another more powerful force. Not another person, but life taking her in directions and circles I can not ever hope to travel. Very well done, thank you for entering my contest.
~A heart's hope lies with Belladonna~ -
"you love her
she loves you back
what more could you ask for?
you shouldn't desire anymore
your head is telling you you need space
but space could surely break you"
Dude, this is the best one of yours (that I've read) so far. Keep it up, girl.
...and watch out for ze typos. =P
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i could love you but i don't
i could kiss you but i won't
i loved those lines.
i love the rhyming as well.
it adds to this.
wonderful job.
good luck. -
I like this.
Dude I love how you do these rhyming sceems.
Es muy sexy!
Kisses
JC (haha) Just kidding.
XOXOX Misty
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