The storm rages and the waves swell
The light in the lighthouse flckers,
I am frightened, this must be Hell.
I can see a ship battling the ocean,
Desperately clinging on to the winds in motion!
I flash the light for them to see the glare.
I hear screams and crying!
"Help me, I am here"
I must help these people, dear God give me your strength!
For you, and my fellowman I will go that extra length,
Should I take out the longboat?
I Hope it will see us through
Dear God I am putting my faith, and trust in you!
The Wind and rain sting my being, as the elements
strike me and I am no more seeing
I hear the cries, and I shine my light. crying "this way"
"Come this way, it will be alright"
The fading cries, make my soul tormented
Please hang on! I am here to help you
The waves swirling, angry, lashing with vengeance
Why take these souls, it does not make sense
Suddenly a huge light appears from above!
A pathway is shown to these souls out of love
These lost souls have found the way to life evermore.
Once again the Almighty God
Has shown them the door.
A contest entry
- Lighthouses by Turtledove.
650 points, ended February 15, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - *The Lord is Guiding Me Home* by superstition.
600 points, ended January 24, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Getting Gold Like Fort Knox...(NOW 1000, adding more points often) by RyanosaurusWrecks.
1000 points, ended March 11, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Happy Birthday to He Is My Lighthouse by wildfiredreamer.
600 points, ended August 28, 2008, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Lovely Poem
You have penned a lovely poem about the beauty of the lighthouse. A pleasure to read this morning. Take care, Sandy
Congratulations on the Bronze!!!!!!
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Congrats on your bronze. I really enjoyed reading this wonderful poem.
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Nice picture you paint here.
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Thank you very much, this is a beautiful poem... I love lighthouses...
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a good take on a common theme, and i am glad to have read it
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This poem is so beautiful and the perfect example of how something greater is waiting on the other side. When all seems lost, so much is actually being found if you look just hard enough. You told a great story in this write. Inspirational and well written. Thank you for entering the contest and good luck!
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bravo
congratulations on winning the gold nansie, great poem.
my computer is being bad it won't let me capitalize. your poem is great.
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Thanks Katie
I feel absolutely wonderful for being chosen
Hope you computer gets up and running!
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great write and well deserving of the gold trophy
thank you for sharing and keep up the good work this has a good flow and is very creative it paints a very clear picture for the readers
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Thank you Honeybear
Your make me feel wonderful, with your beautiful comment.
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Powerful
The new background is perfect. One small correction left: "Come this way! it will be allright!" "allright" s/b "alright". Not a biggie, but incorrect. One other point when telling a narrative whether in story form or poetics; set the dialogue off in quotation marks. Helps the reader distinguish narration from dialogue or thoughts of the narrator. Excellent write though.
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Thanks Walt , Will correct it
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Perfect!
Well, not perfect...perfection is hard to achieve, however it is using the type of imagery and story line taht I wanted. You are telling it from the Lighthouise Operator's pov. Very well done. Walt.
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MAGNIFICENT
ANOTHER AMAZINGINGLY POWERFUL PIECE HERE. TREMENDOUS IMAGERY RIGHT THROUGHOUT THIS PIECE. I COULD EVEN FEEL THE WAVES AND THE DESPERATION OF THE SITUATION.
I COULD SEE AND FEEL THE POWER OF THE WAVES, BUT YOUR FAITH IN GOD IS STRONG AND YOU BATTLED THE ELEMENTS - TOO LATE THOUGH FOR THOSE POOR SOULS. TAKEN BY GOD. THEY FOUND AN ESCAPE. MAGNIFICENT WRITING.
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