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Dance with the Moon

 

 

 

pixie dust flying around
sparkling in the moon light
send me love and wonderment
as I’m dancing with the moon

send me hearts so full of love
to light upon my skin
fill the sky with awe
as I dance into the sky

send me a touch of velvet
to lie upon the moon

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  • Celticmoon
    February 12, 2007

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    A sweet write for being so short, although I do have one minor suggestion. The double use of the words "moon, sky and love" To use them twice in such a short write, in my opinion, takes away from the piece. I almost felt as if I had read the same line previously. Maybe using an alternatve word in their place might assist that feel to deminish?


    Thanks for entering and good lick!


  • Shadow Lynx
    February 12, 2007
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    Enchanting and imaginative and backed with very cool graphics good luck in the contest


  • Lady Eventide
    February 12, 2007

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    Pretty

    Hey, this was very pretty. I loved your words, your background, your font, and your picture. I think they all complemented each other into making a great poem. Good luck in the contest...I hope that you wish me the same.