I heard your voice in my heart
The blood of our union pulsed through my conscious
Ragged breath bore witness to the maelstrom
The moon is not here anymore
The tides will rest for eternity
The sun's glazed stare tracing a drunken arc
Across Apollo's fields of blue
Flames eschew all worldy aspirations
And all thats left to say?
Hey please look my way again.
A contest entry
- 10 lines........15 minutes by Celticmoon.
300 points, ended February 12, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nice! Loved the feel of this write...please look my way again. Lovely indeed!
Love~
Az
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i love this poem and i really feel this way sometimes...but for me its a bit more mysterious because i dont know the person but they look at me and for that split second when we share something you get kinda a rush and all you want is to feel that way again...u know..or maybe you dont...lol ne ways great poem!!! keep it up!
Kelsi
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Beautiful!!!!
I love this! Such passion! A love to last forever. Great wording.
Thanks for the great read.
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i like this one..its short to the point and just plain sweeet
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Hmmmmmm.....
Interesting write, I enjoyed it. Short and sweet...
Keep on writing with ink that never fade...
Elmarie
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liked it
saying a lot in a little space. i love the ending too.
~marcus
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Though I liked this piece but in a sense it felt somewhat forced from inside you. Almost as if you began to struggle to find the words you wanted to say. Over all a nice read.
Thanks for entering and good luck! -
A beautiful poem, beautiful imagery, beautifully written and all in 15 minutes. Well done. Good luck in the contest...Sue
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Nice entry
Hey, nice entry. I see you got more words in 15 minutes than I did. Nice word choice...very beautiful picture. -
Is absolutely everyone who is taking part in C'moon's contest featuring their work today?
Of the ones I have seen today, this one crams the most into the ten lines. Could this mean you are trying to hard?
It's pretty good. Best of luck in the contest. Have a clap on me.
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