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Hello to You

I pieced it back so neatly
At least that’s what they thought--
My broken heart, my love for you,
They thought I had forgot

The time had passed so slowly
Each day I ached with pain
The visions and the memories
I could not drink away

Our life had been so perfect
It just came to a start
But before we had become one
We had been pulled apart

The morning that it happened
I remember so clear
The words you said to me before
You soon would disappear

“Babe you mean the world to me
I love you more than life,
I know it’s a cliché but I’ll
Still love you when I die…”

I smiled at what you told me
I knew we’d make it through
These feelings that I had were real,
I knew that I loved you

I went to my appointment
I met with Dr. Vick
You see my heart had been failing
They put me on the list

And though it was depressing
Each day I’d make it through
Because I knew no matter what
I always would have you

The meeting went so somber
They told the dirty truth
The list was long and there was no
Guarantee I’d get through

But then someone came knocking
They pulled away the doc
He first had seemed so excited
But then his face looked shocked

I wondered what had happened
He gave a sideways glance
He walked back to me fidgeting
He had an awkward stance

“Good news,” is what he first said,
“We have found you a heart.”
“Then why that look upon your face??
I’d say that’s a good start!”

“You see,” he did continue,
“It’s the heart that we have…
It belonged to someone you know,
I’m very sorry Ma’am.”

The words that he had just said
I could not comprehend
Who could have died so abruptly?
Had it been Grandma Jen?

But suddenly it was clear!
I felt my knees go weak!
The dizziness, it conquered me,
I couldn’t even speak!

I flashed back to that morning,
Those words you’d said to me!
Could you have been that serious!?
WHY COULDN’T I HAVE SEEN!?

They prepped me for surgery
But it was all a haze
I can’t remember anything
That happened for 5 days

And when it was all over
I returned to our house
I found a note you wrote to me
Tucked in my favorite blouse:

“Baby, let me tell you,
I know that you’re upset
But please just listen before you
Do something you’ll regret…
The minute that I saw you,
The minute you first smiled,
I knew the time I’d have with you
Would always be worth while.
I love you more than sunshine,
I love you more than life
I almost died the day you said
You’d love to be my wife!
I know we didn’t get there,
But when I first had heard
That there was a chance you would die
If you couldn’t get cured…
I couldn’t just do nothing!
Something had to be done!
Can’t you see you’re my everything?
Can’t you see you’re the one?
But like I said that morning
I’ll love you when I die
So please, my baby, do not fret
That love is still alive.”

And ‘til this very moment
I have that note with me
I hold it in my hand so tight
And read it each morning

My baby, I do thank you
I know that what you did
Was for my sake, you thought it would
Be better if I lived

But what I can’t understand
Is how you couldn’t see
That I am NOTHING without you
Just like you were with me

And since that day had happened
I’ve tried with all my might
To stand up strong and always try
To put up my best fight

And though they think I’m all right
I just can’t seem to last
The thought of you, the memories
I feel they’ll never pass

So babe, I hope you’re waiting
I hope our love was true
Cuz today I’ll say goodbye to life
But say hello to you

Author notes

A love that was meant to be but only in the life after this.

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 20, 2008
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    Nice write, thank you so much for entering the contest. Good luck.


    whisper


  • over the rainbow--x
    February 13, 2008

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    wow, this felt real?
    was it real?
    it made me cry, this was just sad ]=
    really sad ]=

    thanks for entering, good luck in my contest [=


  • Blooming Poet
    January 30, 2008

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    Being pulled apart from someone you love is hard, I know. This is a very powerful poem and the emotions flow and fit well into this poem and my contest.


  • DeathlyAngel
    January 30, 2008
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    This was good. I loved it. Great job. Good luck


  • Jade-
    January 23, 2008

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    This is soooo good. I don't know what else to say - I am IMPRESSED!!

    Good luck and thank you.

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  • JustAnotherIdoit
    January 16, 2008
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    very, very good. i love your writes. i loved it all. is this a true story?
    this as very intense. i loved every minute and just wanted to read on.


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    December 11, 2007
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    A most intense write this is; very, very well done
    Thank you so much for sharing and for being part of this contest!
    Good luck!

  • darksecrets10
    February 12, 2007
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    i absolutly LOVED it


  • drunknmindsobrheart
    February 12, 2007

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    O MY GOODNESS!!!!!!!


    this was soooooooooooooooo good



    i loved it

    !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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