Black lake reflects a trail of ivory plumes,
Long alabaster rooster's tail of feathers.
Such loveliness could only be the moon's,
Which skinny-dips in lunar altogethers.
Raccoons are catching fish along the shore.
Fastidious little paws that clutch their prizes.
She paddles her canoe with silent oar,
Observing nature's soft nocturne disguises.
Silhouetted loons are rocking low upon the waves,
Asleep till sunlight sets them to their songs.
Her wake dissects the path the moon engraves,
As wilderness whispers tranquilly she belongs.
She'll stay the night forgoing comfort fire,
Moonlight enough by which to pitch a tent.
And by tomorrow should anyone inquire,
No trace reveals her overnight encampment.
Author notes
Part 3 --- Nature
A contest entry
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Comments
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Definitely not one to for go
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What a camper!
You've picked the perfect one for this Boy Scouts adventurous heart. To leave no trace is their practice too!
Good Luck in the contest!
Tang
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This is lovely good luck
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Many thanks for your entry in our 'Nature' contest.We had a mammoth task choosing the winners, we're sorry you were not chosen this time.
Please join us in the remaining contests in our Rhyming Extravaganza.
Sue and Jeff, your contest hosts.
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Beautiful imagery. Very well penned, best of luck in the contest
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I've got to ditto my October comments. This reads even better on a second encounter. Well crafted indeed.
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Excellent work, especially in the lyricism of tone and image. First and last stanzas especially nice, but the internal stanzas stand out in their use of image as well. This is one of the few I've seen recently that immediately impressed with its sense impressions.
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10-3-2007 Thank you for entering my contest.
Unfortunately, since the work won an
Honorable mention trophy in another contest,
it does not qualify for this contest. Too bad.
It’s really good work.
(((Good imagery. You paint a realistic picture that embodies the title of your poem. It almost feels like a traveling nature-lover is taking a picture that also conveys emotion as well as visual stimuli. I did like the imagery of the moon swimming in the lake in it’s altogethers – very creative view of a naked body.)))
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Descriptive and was able to define the message all throughout this piece. Well done
Thanks for sharing and keep on writing my friend.
VIRGOAN -
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Now you got me wanting more. What happens in the morning, during the rest of her trek?
Good job in hooking me in there. Loved it. Good luck -
Artistic
This poem really paints a plethora of beautiful images for me. Each stanza is well written with unique thoughts and descriptions. I really like the moon's significance in this, as it is mentioned more than the other parts of nature. Lovely with these lines "Silhouetted loons are rocking low upon the waves,
Asleep till sunlight sets them to their songs.
Her wake dissects the path the moon engraves,
As wilderness whispers tranquilly she belongs." A truly beautiful poem! Best of luck and thank you for entering my contest
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What a beautiful picture you paint for my minds eye. Wish words would come as readly to me.Very pretty could almost be there.mmmmmmdreamy. Thank you for sharing this.
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Wonderful
Wonderful imagery of natural beauty. I live in the countryside so I can relate to this piece. This is an excellent write.
I'm from Ireland and I am used to UK English spelling of certain words. I know I said in my rules that I would accept Americanised spellings but "Traveler" just doesn't look right to me. I am used to seeing it being spelled as "Traveller", with a double LL (lower case). Other than that, I am very pleased with this entry and the high standard of English that it represents. -
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LOL ... As the saying goes, "you can't please everyone", Shauna. In fact, I used to title this poem with "Traveller", but had several people point out that the standard US spelling was with one, so I changed it to please them. Regardless, I am glad you found some merit in my little rhyme.
A60sMan
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i like this very much. thanks for sharing and i hope to read mre from you soon. maybe after the contest thanks a lot for sharing. well written and wonderfully done
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No trace reveals her overnight encampment - A very strong line in its simplicity
Nice write.
Thanks for sharing and I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing my friend.
>>>VIRGOAN
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This is simply lovely.
You have written poetry
for a long while? This
reminds me of my home...
Love, Lane
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This reminds me of my home...
Unobtrusive Traveler is one of my favorite pieces and I was honored that you found merit in it too, Lane. Where is home?
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