you've used my love
made it yours for awhile
then thrown it away
back in my face
wiping your hands clean
broken hearted I continue
reflecting on this affair
that soured and curdled
as spoilt milk on a hot day
goes bad and is chucked out
Author notes
Heartbreak runs rampant - even on Valentines Day. An entry only for this contest - no truth in the lines at all.
A contest entry
- 10 lines........15 minutes by Celticmoon.
300 points, ended February 12, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - options take a look by racergirl212006.
1800 points, ended November 9, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i really like how you describe heart break i can relate to this a lot. thanks for entering
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great description. good way to describe that. thanks so much for entering
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you've used my love
made it yours for awhile
then thrown it away
back in my face
wiping your hands clean
Why am I relating to this right now ..
as times i wish that i could turn back time
and its not possible
and i dunno how common it would be
but it hurts to break up .. on valentine's day
its almost like each step each turn .. hurts
i dont know what to say anymore
keep it up
~* NeveR *~
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powerful. a few typing errors but those can always be fixed. it is true that heartbreak happens even on valentines day. good luck in your contest keep writing and remember that time heals everything. even a broken heart
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good
This is a day that evokes lots of poems, I'm sure, from the most serious to the most trivial, the simplest child's to the tyhe most complicated of emotions. Happy Valentine's Day!
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you have managed to capture the raw essence of the flip side of romance. I hope that your Valentine's Day is brighter and better...you deserve all the best! Happy Valentine's day! peace & love, Kendal
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Well you have captured the other point of view well. If you can write with such passion on a subject that is not a personal experience, that is a skill of a true writer. Unfortunately this has happened to me.
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A strong piece you have penned grannyeri. It's speak not only volumes but the truth as well for I have seen it too many times. And even too me and that's speaking from last year's valentine's day. But that's history.
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Must be horrible to feel this way with the big day approaching, to feel all alone and heartbroken, great emotion and imagery painted here, goodluck again in the contest
Karen -
great
perfection at it's peak...I loved it...I can't wait to read more from you in the near future...keep up the terriffic work..
your friend,
Ace ♠
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you always leave me thinking...feeling
you know what you do..but you use your words you say what some of us cannot find the courage to say...thank you for that , thank you -
Good write!
A beautiful use of imagery throughout the poem.You've "used my love for awhile...then tossed it back in my face...like spoiled milk on a hot day goes bad and is chucked out" A tremendously powerful imagery used here....Short but very effective,in convincing the reader that this was not a very pleasant relationship...rather take advantage kind..Good write! -
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I wrote a poem about Valentines...but it wasn't for this contest...and it was quite humorous and sad. Perhaps you should throw in some humor.
I liked this poem though. It really tells a lot...even though it is quite sad. My entry for this contest is far from this...but that doesn't mean I don't like yours. The font for the poem (red) and the picture goes good with the entry. Good luck. -
Will you stop it already? Valentines Day is supposed to be happy. Your poetry is so good it makes me want to cry. Amera
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this is a perfect write from you. you amaze me every time i read something from you. i love this picture also. good luck int this contest which you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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