Sitting wide awake
When I should b in bed
Many a thought
Begins races through my head
Why do I deserve this?
Consumed in all this pain
Never will I be whole
And never can I be sane
Confused of how I feel
Wondering what it’s called
This never leaves my mind
And never will be stalled
I thought id make it through
And that I would be strong
Now it is apparent
I proved myself wrong
Never did I think
I could feel this alone
Knowing I’ve been left here
All on my very own
I’ve been forever scarred
By the things that they say
So many broke me down
And still do, to this day
When did this begin?
I really don’t remember
But I will forever dread
Every single September
A bad thing always happens
At this dreaded time
Weather it be a death
Or even a horrible crime
I sit praying to myself
That this won’t last forever
Will this hurting ever stop?
I know that it will never!
Author notes
Well i don't no what to say, its how i feel, and it probably doesnt make sence but it makes sence to me, if u have any questions about it ask and ill fill you in.... much lub
Please tell me what you think
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I like the feeling behind the poem, but I feel that it was a little too crowded with un-needed words. I know that doesn't make sence, it didn't make sence to me either the first time someone said it to me. Basicly, you're putting words like "and, but" etc into lines when they're not really needed. "Never will I be whole/ And never can I be sane", you could leave out the "and" in the last line of the second stanza; it would make the poem flow better. Very nice write. I can see a lot of potential. ^_^
Hell Angel
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Thanks for that.. ill work on it and see how i go. i like getting advice on things like that
thanks for the comment, take care
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Touching
Wow I love the flow of this poem it really touched me and it makes perfect sense
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Thanks for the comment.
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BE STRONG ! !
You will get through the tough times. Your family here at AP LOVE YOU ! !
Keep letting it out, and you will feel better 
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LOVE IT PUPPET! Very good word play!
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