Waiting in the shadows,
time creeps by.
With dawn still a long way off
he thinks of her
They had spent months happy,
a content, simple life.
Nothing had ever had the power
to force them apart
But because of her separate world,
the one he could never
really be a part of,
she slowly walked away
Devastatingly lost
with nowhere to reach,
he slowly became detached
from everything that used to be
But, still,
something pulled him back.
A prospect that not all was lost,
his love stronger than he thought
Waiting in the shadows,
he remembers every sensation,
and he longs to hold her one last time,
keep her safe from her world willing to hurt her.
Author notes
i don't know if you could consider it black and white, but it talks about being lost and found, so maybe that counts for something....
A contest entry
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The fact that, after it was all over, he'd still give anything for her, is heartbreaking. A truly moving write; I am glad you entered this in my contest.
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I personally liked it...love lost....so many poems written on this very subject...i like how you weaved the found part at the end..tied it up in a neat lil package...oh and tons of emotions in this...tugs at the heart for sure..
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Oh and this one as well
"But because of her seperate world," separate.
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Thank you for the revision I really appreciate it.
Now some spelling
"With dawn still a long ways off" long way
"really be apart of," a part of
"Devistatingly lost" devastatingly
"no where" nowhere.
A nice poem I like the haunting power in it.
Good luck in my contest.
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I just had a quick look at this for me the subject is fine lost found love/ hate but i am struggling a little because you capitalise all begining of lines and do not use any punctuation. I wish you could revise this.
Thank you for entering I will read all poems 3 times and always at least once after the contest has closed.
You can revised anytime before this I will notice it and judge accordingly.
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