No one sees the tears that fall from my eyes
Or feels the burning pain as my heart slowly dies
I lie alone awake in my bed
Trying to drown the thoughts in my head
My efforts to stop the flood of my tears
Only increases as I think of my fears
Hope that is fading from love I can't find
Sanity sinking from the loss of my mind
No one can help me, I'm all alone
Woefully learning to cope on my own
Strength is something that never stays long
For depression can be brought on by a song
I feel I am cursed with this fragile heart
Every night it tugs and tears me apart
The demons within slash through my dreams
My protests unheard through my silent screams
The darkness surrounds me and swallows me whole
I fight till the shadows take over my soul
Author notes
Dark and lonely nights continue to find me no matter how hard I try to escape them.
A contest entry
- Alone.....Prewrites allowed by LoveNeverDies.
370 points, ended May 17, 2007, 93 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything. by Sonofdead.
800 points, ended June 26, 2007, 138 entries
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wow.. i really like this poem... the rhymes are simply amazing... and the end ties in really well... i cant really say anything else except... amazing job!!
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wow wow wow wow wow wow wow this is an amaizing write definaetly one i would put on my myspace you will cpompletely get credit thank you soooooooo so soso much for entering i really really love this poem its sooooo awesome thanks again
issy -
hey hun..this was a good poem and i can really relate to this poem as well..it really hit close to home for me and i can really relate to this poem and all that you described you were feeling..keep writting and good luck in the contest
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NICE!!
I love your rhyming here. It is not forced at all! Each line is a very powerful and and can even stand alone without any!
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Great!
Wow... This is really nice. I think I know what you're trying to say, and I've been through it. ...and depression can definitely be brought on by a song. Thank you for making that statement as well. This poem really speaks to me. The only minor issue in the poem is your spelling of "demons." You could get by with spelling it "demons" or "daemons," but "deomons" isn't a valid spelling. Great poem! Keep up the good writing!
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oh wow that was intense and deep I love it! I liked the first I dunno 5 lines alot they were very relatable I think everyone feels and thinks this way at some point great job
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