Right now I am a wet lump of clay waiting to be sculpted
Use your skill; mold me into something beautiful
Transform me
Guide my every curve with gentle hands
Detail and define me with steady fingers
Design a site to behold
A vision of elegance
A radiance to capture
I am a wet lump of clay
Do as you wish
Author notes
This is the kind of poem where you take what you can get. You could take it literally and assume that I am really talking about a lump of clay or you could take it as a metaphor and assume that I am talking about myself. There are many ways to read it. Take what you can get.
A contest entry
- Anything && Everything. by Antebellum.
600 points, ended July 20, 2009, 166 entries
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amazing imagery.
this is beautifully written, and i agree..
you can get many things out of this.
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i really like your vision here, its very effective!is very interesting to analyse an image like this
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It appears you've said exactly what you wanted to say, very clearly, with a wonderful "catchiness" that grabs hold and makes the reader say, "Wow, isn't that clever!" Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet. ~Midnight Lace
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Very beautiful imagery here. I think sometimes the influence of someone who knwos what's right for you and can turn you into something you desire, is a good person to help you 'mold' into the person you really want to be.
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very very true. I agree with you a lot on this poem and the authors notes. You take what you can get and run with it. Excellent work. Thanks for entering the contest and the best of luck to you. Kassie -
I love it!
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I went for the metaphor myself, and while I enjoy the poem I thought that last line was a bit weak in comparision. Everywhere else you used strong, vivid words, but for some reason, do as you wish just didn't match for me. Still an enjoyable read.
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It reminds me of the effect the people around you can have on you. People such as Parents, Siblings, Friends, Co-Workers, and Classmates all have an affect on the way a person thinks and the person that they become. By choosing your association carefully you could in effect choose who you are molded into. Such as a wet lump of clay is changed by the constant pull of gravity, so to our lives may be changed by the smallest influences. Great poem! Keep writing and always tell it "From The Heart".
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i like the verbs you used. Transform, guide, mold; loved them.
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I had to read this a few times but I really liked it. I think that you've done a great job and I appreciate the author notes. It helps to understand the poem better.
Kari -
I adored this. I reread it several times, in order perhaps to gain different perceptions from it.
"Use your skill; mold me into something beautiful
Transform me"
Speaks to me of perceptions themselves. A lump of clay you may be, but others... I am sure see something beautiful within you. I see a poet. Great job.
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Thanks!
Thank you for your lovely comment.
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this kind of makes it seem hopeless, like you can't mold yourself and other people have to shape you into whatever they want. i don't like the feeling "wet lump of clay" brings me lol. i don't like that visual. but it's drastically changed with the prettier language within the poem. really short and simple and to the point. i liked it.
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really like it
feels familiar 
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You can read this numerous ways... i've gotten atleast three ways so far..
Awesome. I lurve it mostly because of it being short, sweet, and flexible.
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i really like the spiritual intonation this has. thank you for sharing this with me. it is a very good prayer. viyanna rosemarie
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Beautfiul write
To me it tells of a personal transformation like in what was so plain became beautiful like the lump of clay that was molded. I really liked your poem and I thank you for sharing it with me...
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Reading through it twice, I've already found two different ways, depending on where you stand, to take this piece. A very interesting, personal write - thank you for sharing this piece of yourself.
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This is quite the interesting piece. I like it. It even gives me a familiar feel, almost as if it were something I'd have written at some point. Thank you for entering and good luck!
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