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Immortal Wishes of a Fallen Victim

Hollow shrines
placed decadently
around a labyrinth
of mystic desire
to see the splatter
of blotched ink
as the abyss descended
into tangled chaos
merge together
the severed ties
of families
with the ghostly
obsession
of inhabited
family homes
detach yourselves
from the incoherent
hushed secrecy
as the frantic
frail personalities
are shrouded in
the imagination
conjured during the
twilight hours
of a roman siege
of no certain origin
and with no
definite home
it stains the fabric
of everyday life
as the immortal wishes
of a fallen victim
destroyed,

misled

...
by a lullaby

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combining two titles and a lot of words from the word bank

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  • OurxBeginning
    March 3, 2007

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    You really painted a nice write here. I liked the imagery in this and how you made it come to life in my mind. Deep and I liked the ending. Thanks for entering and good luck. ~~


  • Bruised.Roses
    February 14, 2007

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    this was a great write..i like the way you combined two of the titles and the way you used the words from the wordbank your poem was emotional and powerful good luck in our contest

    XTashaX


  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    February 12, 2007

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    This was an awesome write! Very creative and unique..i enjoyed reading this..your words were strong and powerful..you write beautifully..you are very talented keep writting. I love the way you used the word bank to make an awesome poem! keep it up..thanks for entering our contest and good luck

    ~Chrissy~

  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    February 12, 2007
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    This was an awesome write! Very creative and unique..i enjoyed reading this..your words were strong and powerful..you write beautifully..you are very talented keep writting. I love the way you used the word bank to make an awesome poem! keep it up..thanks for entering our contest and good luck

    ~Chrissy~