It seems so distant, so far away
Since you were that man, not as today.
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We filled everyday, and spent it freely
Is it so hard now...is it? really?
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You are now just a ghost,
Drifting somewhere, off the coast.
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In a place I can't see you,
In a place I no longer know you.
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You are a father...my father,
I have tried so hard, and wondered why do I bother?
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For a man who has lost himself
For a man who has forgot myself.
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Or, maybe I'm wrong, I can admit it
Just let me know, have you quit?
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If all you need is my aid,
Stand up and shout it, don't be afraid!
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For no matter how many debts,
You collect in your nets
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I will still be your daughter
And you...my father.
Author notes
*damn updating here* 7/17/08
he's no longer a part of my life, nor do i even care about this loss.
he's cut, gone, erased from my heart!
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To: The Missing Man (aka-Dad)
*THIS IS ACTUALLY A REAL PICTURE OF US, obviously when i was little. I think aruond six-ish*
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A contest entry
- Father-Daughter Poetry by AndStarsDoShine.
300 points, ended March 7, 2007, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is such a touching write. So full of emotion, pain, sadness and loss. Wonderfully written.
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This poem is really sad and speaks your emotions so well. It flows and keeps the reader foscused and intrugued all the way through. well done
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The morale of this story tells me throguh ups and downs the love remained the same a glorious write!
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Going with a lot on this tenure, the much appreciated father who maybe near or far in a caring sense is still loved as much as continuous enjoyment. Nicely done
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guess we both know about this stuff.
iloveditri.
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This is sad. I miss my daddy but he didn't leave of free will but was taken from this world. I'm sorry for the hardships that you face here.
Keep your head up.
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This is beautifully written! The unconditional love that you have for your father. It's terrible that many kids today grow up with only one parent. It can be very difficult and trying as you get older. But, I guess that we learn to live with it which is very sad. All the best to you my friend and keep up the great work here!
Jeremy0826 -
good stuff/so close to home
listen, heres's the deal man. everything, and everybody changes. EVEN OUR DADS!!! ok? I remember the days of 'spam and spaghetti o's'! now! my dad says it was never that way. my only reply to this is, "then where did i get all these scars from?" ok? the only thing that don't change, is the fact that EVERYTHING changes... think about that. you're different. so why do you think it would'nt be for your dad? just something to think about... love GYPSYfish and p.s. the reason you 'bother', is, well hell, cause HE'S YOUR DAD!!!
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Heartbreaking
My sweet Friend
I read this and the emotions just flowed all over me and I felt your pain through this piece...So many people can relate to this and that makes it even sadder...
The poem flowed very well and I did not find anything to complain about...So well done on this magnificent piece of writing
Much Love
Tes
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There is such an amazing power in the imagery you have woven into this piece - so very surreal. I really enjoyed this... It made me stop and think. That is something that really makes for a fantastic read. To slow down, and enjoy something fresh and vivid.there is no doubt you are in control of your pen and know just where to take us. Great piece!
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Wonderfully expressed and written
I really felt this heartfelt write. I to wish I had my father but didn't but like you say in your poem he is still your father. Beautifully expressed with such emotion the words flowed wonderfully. Thank you for sharing. (Lisa)
"If all you need is my aid,
Stand up and shout it, don't be afraid!
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For no matter how many debts,
You collect in your nets
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I will still be your daughter
And you...my father."
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This is so sad. Though, your dad is still out there alive. Mine died when I was 12. I would give so much to have him back in my life. The poem itself is beautifully written. Flows well and shares emotions. Keep it up. Take care.
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This is really heartfelt and emotional. Unfortunately, I can relate to this and I know a lot of other people will be able to as well. This is really written well, and it flows nicely. You did a great job. Keep it up.
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