Let me
black your eyes and slit your throat.
Let me
carve my name into your arm, a little love note.
Let me
send your mind reeling with thoughts of us.
Let me
show you the world and gain your trust.
Let me
hold your heart tight in my hands.
Let me
break it up so I can fix it again.
Let me
wipe away your burning tears.
Let me
fight away your many fears.
Let me
apologize for all I've done to you.
Let me
make it up to prove my feelings are true.
Let me
say I'm sorry for blacking your eyes.
Let me
say I'm sorry for making you cry.
Let me
wake up and think it's a nightmare.
Let me
hold you close when it's reality standing there.
Let me
have a second chance to make up for mistakes.
Let me
have someone who can see my true face.
Let me
learn what is living, learn how to live.
Let me
learn to help others, learn how to give.
Let me
understand the depths of your heart.
Let me
trust you to not break mine apart.
Let me
lean on you so you can lean on me.
Let me
hold your hand and learn to be happy.
Let me
understand what it is I've done wrong.
Let me
become what you need and love you lifelong.
Let me
listen to your teachings when you help me to learn.
Let me
have your trust because it's something I've earned.
Let me
kiss your blackened eyes and bandage your cuts.
Let me
be your lady, no if and's or but's.
Let me
be if not your lady, simply a friend.
Let me
be thankful for having you in the end.
Let me
love you with every fiber of my being,
Let me
thank you for always patiently teaching.
Let me
stop being the one to hurt.
Let me
get the punishment I truly deserve.
Let me
kiss once more your blackened eyes.
Let me
Cry because you told me it's alright to cry.
Author notes
I just sat at the computer, started typing, and my heart threw up on the screen...I think this is describing the guy I want...or the relationship I want...or something entirely different. Maybe the friendship I need, or...well I'm not sure. Hope you enjoyed it.
--Edit March 2, 2007--
I had to put this, although nobody will read it. I just realized what this was about. Reading it in poetry circle, then reading it over and over and over again, I knew. I had to be sure, so I kept reading it. My subconscious mind was trying to send me a message, and I've been too pig-headedly moronic to pay attention. But now I know...and I don't like what it's about at all.
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this is great. I like the repedtivness (haha jacked up that word) anyways great write.
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Amazing!!!!
This poem is completely amazing...especially for just sitting down and start typing...I give you major props
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WOW!!!
I loved this poem so much!!!! Beautiful job!!!! I can really feel the emotion that your heart threw up. I am very pleased with this poem. Great Job!!!! -
Wow, a very intense read to say the very least. I actually liked the repetition of Let me...I dunno just hit me in a nice fashion. Over all...enjoyable. Best of luck in this contest.
Bella
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Sometimes we have to write because we have to write. We can edit, change and rewrite it many times, but the underlying theme, thought is always there. Keep writing.
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Amazing<3!
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Very GOOD!!!
I really enjoyed this poem, it has very touching meaning of a relationship. You represent a true poet.!!!!
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amazing poem.....
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Aww that's sad. =D Lizzeh is a heart breaker and a healer- depending on her mood.
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WOW!!!!!
This poem is everything a poem should be and even better! It shows deep emotion and you true feelings. Very nice work!
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OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
to tell you the truth...i didn't know that you could write poems like that. repetition fo effect...that was really good!!! man oh man...is this something that i should know about (lol!)???????? you don't have to tell me if you don't want to. i've learned that i should do that more...not force people to tell me things...it should help me in the future. but anyway...back on topic. i totally enjoyed your poem. this is your best work yet!!!!
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HOLY CRAP!!! THis was LonG< AMAZING< TRUE< GREAT< HOT< SEXY< ANYTHinG u CAN SAY TO DESCRIBE WONDERFUL!!!! OMG THIS IS REALITy that every ONE WANTS!!!! i didnt know u can write like this lol hallalujah (sp?)
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