Written down
in a manner designed for
ease of comprehension,
life doesn't look too complex;
a thesis is all you need.
When ordered, numbered, bulleted,
the day-to-day appears linear
and simple. Deceitful.
Circles, however,
do not translate to two dimensions;
it is this that complicates writing.
A three-dimensional world is not easily equatable
to words;
a poet is all you need.
Author notes
Inspired by a poll on fiberopticjesus' melo. Not that that means anything to you.
Any suggestions whatsoever to improve this are much appreciated.
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I like this. There's something about it that just...appeals to me? I guess what I get out of it is that science isnt everything, which is a theme I definately love.
I like the form. How you have "a thesis" and "a poet is all you need" really makes it interesting, kind of like...you thought this was all you needed, but there's more to humanity than that. Downplaying ability, I guess.
The third stanza seems like the turning point because of the ending line, almost like its saying things can't be simple, when are they?
I like the fourth stanza. The thought of circles and how much more complicated they are than straight lines really drives home what you're saying.
If I'm misinterpreting, I'm sorry. Blame college =)
Overall, I just think this is pretty cool =)
~blessings~
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Is there such a thing as misinterpreting? I mean, if you somehow drew that this was a treatise about how cows like to go swimming in search of fish, THEN I would be concerned, but you pretty much can't go wrong with poetry!
I absolutely THRIVE on your commentary! I love you. <3
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Favorite person award. You. You are amazing. You are so truely giften. This style suits you. It shows your strengths. One of my favorites, by far.
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