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Crow's Mushroom and Electoral Moments - after Ted Hughes Crow

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When the Button was Pressed


When the button was pressed and the mushroom cloud
finally drifted away
like an ozone layer stripped from the stratosphere

And the only face left in the world
lay melted
between waxed hands sticky with weight,

and the genes were mated forever
and the greens mutated forever
and the shadow-doll lolled upon the gravel
of the abandoned world

Alongside the abandoned gavel
and the bell that tinkled never
God returned to Her drawing-board
to discover the decimal point of error.



Parody Ted HUGHES – Crow



That Moment...when the Votes were Counted

When the votes were counted, conform with their little crosses,
with the ballot-boxes lying empty
like empty promises splashed over a Westminster canvas,

and the only independant candidate left in the world
lay broken
in a vice-like grip, not even a token

opposition remained, - gone forever...
candid expression censored forever,

and the body politic hung drawn and quartered by politicians for ever
on an abandoned world among abandoned constitutions,
free thinkers erased together,

even Crow had to start searching for fresh pickings...


Parody Ted HUGHES – Crow


© Jonathan Robin

Author notes

http://www3.sympatico.ca/sylviapaul/hughes_crow.htm
http://www.thebeckoning.com/poetry/hughes/hughes.html


That Moment

When the pistol muzzle oozing blue vapour
Was lifted away
Like a cigarette lifted from an ashtray

And the only face left in the world
Lay broken
Between hands that relaxed, being too late

And the trees closed forever
And the streets closed forever

And the body lay on the gravel
Of the abandoned world
Among abandoned utilities
Exposed to infinity forever

Crow had to start searching for something to eat.


Ted HUGHES 1930_1998 - Crow

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  • Wallace
    July 22

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    The last three lines absolutely kill me. The poem appeals to man's own underlying fears of self-destruction in our present day rat race. And it is also intriguing how you really could meld voices through imitating or making a parody of Hughes's work. It really can be a difficult feat to take on someone else's voice in poem rather than just your own but still to make it your own. Well done.

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  • Thrilla N9nna 503
    July 5, 2007

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    well this is very different, but excellent, be proud this was very entertaining! kudos to you dear friend!

  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    February 14, 2007
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    congratulations.. I knew I wasn't biased..

  • EdP
    February 13, 2007

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    Speaking of wordplay, is "vice-like" intentional? If so, well played. If not, well, at least you got lucky.

    fine plumage here, ducky.

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  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    February 13, 2007
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    Somehow we were on the same thougth with Crow, Ted Hughes, Assia and Sylvia. Strange that the crow brought two totally different views....
    Your writing, as always, is precise and ful of underlying meanings. Bravo!

  • Cat gold member
    February 12, 2007

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    i am shocked i haven't seen you before- unless this is an alter ego- but this is excellent- so well done- a perfect parody of ted hughes's piece- and i use the word parody only because it is your word of choice-


    love your wordplay gavel/ gravel- love your use of crow here- just excellent


    good to read you here-

    m

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  • KatandLRpoetry
    February 11, 2007
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    i really like it

    Great job your an amazing writer


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    February 11, 2007
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    no.. although that line did stand out, for reasons other than what looks obvious..

    no.. I'm not..

  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    February 11, 2007
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    this is excellent..
    the transition through the variations of form retain the same 'internal' meaning, which echos Hughes' very well..

    but it's the strength of the first one that I find an attraction in.. the way it says ( as do all of them ) ..when we destroy ourselves ..

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