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Living A Memory

I'm lost-
Drifting away,
Living a memory.
Avoiding winter's harsh redress
Today.

My mist
Of dreams are sweet-
They let me cherish spring,
Those warm busy days of the past
I miss.

I dance
With my husband.
I play the piano
For all the friends I entertain.
I live.

I'm cold-
Give me my quilt.
This sheet holds out nothing,
I feel the winter fighting me
Again.

Author notes

This is now under the "mists" catagory. I guess it's a loose interpretation, but... oh well.

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  • TwilightPanther gold member
    June 5, 2007

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    very good! and brought back memeories for me as well: I'm cold- give me my quilt.This sheet holds out nothing, I feel the winter fightiing me Again... thank you for sharing


  • pickers silver member
    June 2, 2007
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    Lovely, lovely. I really enjoy cinquains and these are great. Some beautiful moments captured in your wonderful words. My favourite of the four is the "I dance" one. It conjures up an image of a happy marriage and good friends. Congrats on a sweet write.

  • Ephiphany gold member
    May 28, 2007
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    Hi, I just wanted to say...

    That you are an amazing artist, and I enjoyed reading your work. I will be visiting more often, hope you dont mind.

    Ephiphany

    My mist
    Of dreams are sweet-
    They let me cherish spring,
    Those warm busy days of the past
    I miss.

    I dance
    With my husband.
    I play the piano
    For all the friends I entertain.
    I live.

    I'm cold-
    Give me my quilt.
    This sheet holds out nothing,
    I feel the winter fighting me
    Again.

  • ibsons hysops
    May 27, 2007

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    wow!!!! this is completely amazing!!! I really loved this one!!! U R A great poet!!! There is a mastery here that i sooo enjoy!!! I love every line, every stanza, just everything!!!!

  • masterblaster gold member
    March 4, 2007

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    Hi, well some did drift into the mist a little,lol but the second one was spot on,lovely flow, few people seem to be able to capture that in a cinquain, you did, all the best in the contest,Di

  • suseann gold member
    February 22, 2007
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    Lovely quad cinquain.Good luck in the contest.


  • Abariel Raven gold member
    February 15, 2007

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    I don't know about the choices but this was a well written poem. Thank you so much for sharing it with us.
  • painter
    February 15, 2007
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    !

    thats intresting

  • Tirrell
    February 11, 2007
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    Ok. Ok.
    I like the chain you have woven.
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