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Therapy?

Paradise, a place for peace from discovered fears.

You delved my mind but I still breath the blues;

I've learned to survive with my feelings,

Endure the pain bordering on insane.

The serrated edge of your unspoken words

Hides discerning looks behind soft-spoken lines.

 

What help you've been --not clearly seen,

Perhaps within mists of speaking hides the key.

For me, this cannot be!

I've lived and believed this everyday;

Yet still beneath that edge, lies instability

Treading a tenuous ledge with decaying fetus,

Engaging my tightrope walking abilities.

 

What benifits exist retracing my life?

When routine does nothing but atrophy my mind,

Hampers progress,

Egresses the process of living creatively.

 

So: give me meat on which to eat,

Make my bed away from the dead,

Give me tools to swim from pools,

Take me away from insanities sway,

Give me life with no inner strife,

Rake my coals, revive my soul!

 

I'm here for help that holds substance,

Not to rehash, that which is old!!!

 

Step away and give me none of your lip,

I've sat your table and supped your wine,

Now I die and lay to rest, this relationship.

 

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  • Florida Sunshine gold member
    October 19, 2007

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    The ending is powerful and strong~ I really like the heartbeat of the piece. There are many times words cut like a sword, diving deep into the hearts of many.

    Thanks for entering my round contest ~ good luck to you.
  • Susan E. Pennycuff gold member
    February 17, 2007
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    I so live that tightrope you are talking about dear... this was a remarkable write, well done!


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    February 11, 2007

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    you have journied well my friend, and reached your own sought destiny. With your knowledge, you have in these words, laid down a clear track for followers. yes some paths do become unsteady, but you have been steadfast and true in your steps, leaving traces for others to see the way clear. a very well put together piece.


  • slipperssun gold member
    February 11, 2007

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    this is awesome.... i love the way i could read this one aloud. the ending is fantastic and i wish you lots of luck in the contest....
    p.s. the ending has a meesage to say its finally done with... i hope your ok?

  • PalmettoSky
    February 11, 2007

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    this is so nice. This (and you probably do not want to hear this) was really cute. It was quite original.
    I loved this.This was done very well. good job for throwing it out this way. I think all of these other talented writers will identify with the idea here. Your writing is almost conversational and I value that in prose because it makes it more reachable. The rhythm and rhyme are lovely. A sense of warmth and light came over me while reading.

  • Sacrificial Love
    February 11, 2007

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    BRAVO...

    I love this...

    strength to walk away from that which decays the very essence of livelihood...

    I love you work ladybug...
    but telling you that borders on redundancy...

    xoxo
    Sahabah alMahgrebi
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