As the sun sets beautifully, she starts to tear,
Wondering, what in the world is she doing here?
She doesn't deserve such treatment as this,
On account of her old life, something she doesn't miss.
She turns away, hiding her tears,
As he stares pointedly, wondering what she fears.
With a gentle tug, their nose to nose,
In her eyes, he see's life's blows.
With a callused thumb, he wipes her face clear,
Smiling softly at what he holds most dear.
Looking into his loving gaze,
She's put into her most happy faze.
Finally finding someone that accepts her through and through,
From there, their love quickly grew.
Leaning in, her eyes start to close,
Their lips meet and, his love, he shows.
Pulling apart, he closes in on one ear,
Feeling her shiver, he pulls her in near.
He whispers,"Never again in this life will you have to hide,"
"Because always and forever, I'll be by your side."
Author notes
Option 3!
A contest entry
- February New Member's Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended March 14, 2007, 76 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Write me a love poem (Girls Only) by soldierKFM.
375 points, ended April 26, 2007, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Seekers of Love, Paradise, or Peace by Wandering Spirit.
600 points, ended May 6, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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ok this by far is the best poem i have read. you show much emotion in this poem. i congratulate you on such a fine poem. good luck and good job
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Such sweet words.. thank you for sharing.
Good luck to you in the contest. welcome to the site.
~Kristy -
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So very wonderfully and beautifully penned! This is what true romance is
Much enjoyed your poem and look forward to reading more! All the best to you in your writing endeavors! -
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Awesome !!! simply superb. So much of romance derived from that picture.. am glad it triggered your muse up. Yuo seemed to have drank deeper the love shining in that picture.. thankyou for the entry. Wonderfully penned.
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It is such a wonderful feeling to love and be loved as in this poem. I think you did a marvelous job capturing that feeling here. Please remember to put which option you chose in the authors comments or you will not be in the running for a trophy. I wish you luck in the contest and I hope that you enjoy the site.
Despair
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awesome
i love this how could u say that mine was better
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this is great great great!!!!!!!
i love the imagery and everything
it's oh so beautiful!
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welcome to All Poetry New Poets Contest
This is a very tender write. I love the first line of your poem: "As the sun sets beautifully, she starts to tear"
also the words "With a callused thumb, he wipes her face clear,
Smiling softly at what he holds most dear."
especially the latter sentance gives the feel of such tenderness, the callused thumb against what would be the soft, fresh skin of the face, it makes one want to sigh as the imagery of your words begins to work on the mind.
Perhaps I may offer a little suggestion? leaving a line space between your stanzas where you have a full stop, may make a difference to how the poem is presented on the page, this will also make it easier for your reader to distinguish easily where each stanza begins and ends.
I really did enjoy reading this, you have done extremely well, keep up the good work and best wishes for the contest
Have you put which option you chose for the contest?
~Katie~
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