in the attention of your mouth
I open skywise:
a fountain of red words
bursts out from within,
rises,
falls,
scatters itself
in a surge
of exclamations
gingered on the stalk
of your tongue
I weigh no more
than a ripple
Author notes
Gingered = to scent/spice; to invigorate, to add red tones.
In a list
A contest entry
- Valentines With a Twist... by Mad Moon.
300 points, ended February 17, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-writes & Fresh Writes Welcome Here! by LadyUnique.
300 points, ended January 17, 2008, 65 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your BEST dirty pretty writes here! by perfectsunset.
550 points, ended April 27, 38 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Title- 5/5
Creativity- 5/5
Use of metaphors, imagery, etc.- 10/10
Overall package- 5/5
Total= 25/25
This was amazing, truly.
I love how you didn't punctuate,
it made this a more enjoyable
and smoothe read.
I am very impressed and I
really like your style and choice
of words.
This was a masterpiece!
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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oh -- i love this one, Nic....very sensual & beautiful!
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yep. exactly.
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delicious and elegant. this my kind of poetry
thank you for entering and best of luck
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very beautiful...PK
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Excellent beauty. Awesome, poetess. Just awesome. Asfand and me should search the dictionaries from today... we don't know enough adjectives...
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not sure bout this one...think im lost...u razzing me with yer tongue? lol
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Brill
Such eloquence makes me bleed and how much I need that. a fountain of red words
bursts out from within,
rises,
falls,
scatters itself
in a surge of exclamations;
Love those words
Your it for me
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Good stuff
I like the way you did this poem its so gental and caressingly softly said.I love the way you write REA -
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Thanks REA
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This is plain-spoken and comely. It makes me quiver to read such elegance. You never cease to make me sigh Nicolette. What a wonderful string of divine words. Your muse paints lovely picture. Just splendid!
Congratulations on winning the Gold. If there was Platinum, you would have had to receive that. The highest honor to you for something this stunning!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Renee, you have such a generous heart, my friend. Thank you so much
. Time I visit your beautiful pages again!!
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Okay...I just want to melt into this one! The use of metaphor in this is absolutely stellar! The perfect entry for this contest, indeed. So soft...so sensual...so full of feeling, and imagery. The poetic devices are used with great perfection. Line breaks, indentations, figurative language, all expertly used and delivered. An absolutely wonderful entry, indeed! Thanks, and good luck.
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WOW, Mary - thank you so much for "melting". I'm glad you liked this one !!
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I still really love this one.
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Wow. How cleverly written and the use of the words is magical
A really well thought out poem and so full of emotion. Welldone -
Another one beautifully done sweetie....I can imagine ginger on the tongue so vividly, lol... a lovely mix of sexuality scattering itself to an "exclamation"... you have done it again as only you can do! RED....Your words are so well chosen as always...a golden piece dear poet, always a joy reading your work... Love to you sweetie, Annie
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This was exquisite, colorful, vivid throughout your verses and some sort of sensual that I just can't put justice to words to describe...
I used to wish I could applaud more than once. Now, I find myself wishing I could use all 6 at once.
Kimmie
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Kimmie - thank you for the kind words - you made me smile. Glad you enjoyed this touch of ginger... I haven't written one like this in a while, lol!
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beautiful...
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thank you, Al
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Gingered indeed! Flavor-bursting sensation, much more than Valentine sweet. Nicolette, you are amazing, girl! February does seem to be a burst of red just before spring annouces her/himself, and the idea of weightlessness is so appealing. I love this!
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Thank you, dear Karen. Glad you liked this touch of February-red
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gosh almighty!!!
WOOT... very nice Nicci.... very nery indeed
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Nerdy....is this how nerds do it - hehehe!! Thanks, Gill ~
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Nicolette,
this was beautiful, especially the first two lines, coupled with the images of the ginger and the metaphor of ginger.
I can hear the gasps, see the chest rising and falling, am there for the excitement of this moment. this is how sensual poetry should be written, dare I say erotica? I would, but you are the poet, you choose.
The last line places a significance on the moment, more important it seems in perspective than the participants.
Great work.
Jim
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Thanks, Jim....once again you impress with your poetic eye ~
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Divinity embraced!
the color,the flavor,the aftertaste,the lingering,aah i am wandering in paradise!!!
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i swoon i swoon i am without words.
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Without words...and you've said enough. Thanks, Danni ~
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ahhh yes the ginger bread man ...
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Now I know why gingerbread men are always smiling..
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Aaaah...I thought his name was bbb (the ginger bread man)...perhaps he was gingered too...
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"gingered on the stalk
of your tongue
I weigh no more
than a ripple"
Ooohhh, my...This is a delectably loving & sensual tidal wave of a penning, my Sister...Exquisite...Good luck in Mary's contest, my dear Friend...{leaves page whimperin'} 
Vlindertjie
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Hehe...thank you, my "whimpering" friend
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the best wines are light on the pallet, much like the ripple in this poem.
I feel that somebody here should be blushing
bbb
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I wonder who that "somebody" might be...? Thanks, bbb ~
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Oh my,this is at the top of the podium for how to be original and classy with steaming sensuality and the frisson stalks the page not gingerly but generously spicing - simply sensational -yet again you grace the page and allpoetry-love and light,Yvette
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these words are heavy with atmosphere and depth, sensuousness and savoury..ripe and lingering and alive..so lovely!
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Brilliant
I think this is excellent. Wow.
"gingered on the stalk
of your tongue
I weigh no more
than a ripple"
Wow again.
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...thanks, Kathleen, I haven't written one of these red ones in a while!
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Beautiful
absolutely beautiful and with a textured feel.the words just crumble as i speak them.well written,good luck
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Thank you, Helen...another february song ~
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I saw this contest but my muse was riding her horses some other place. I am positively surprised with your used words. Abstract and reality at the same place, framed with love.
~Sonja~
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x a dozen
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And such a ripple to swallow in stream of rush to wash on rock in whiter water running backwards...just a lovly wish of love to clearly wash my Sunday window...and so elegant this is...as usual
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Oh, wow. Now this is something worth waking up and reading. Just... wow.
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